by sexy_chick69
I loved your story, please continue the story if possible.
I liked it, only thing you should check your spelling/punctuation a bit, but otherwise, great story, very good pace and sweet.
an editor is needed. Just simple mistakes like caps and so forth. I will have to read the next to see if it gets better.
i think that if you had some one to edit your work; your stories would be wonderful.
story. With practice and refinement, you should do well. Good luck.