All Comments on 'Cindy A Working Girl'

Well, I thought I'd give you another chance, but I find that I need to repeat myself.

"As a writer, you DON'T have it! It's not likely you'll ever GET it, either. You'd have to go way, way back in school to get the basics of grammar - you know, putting two words together, using proper punctuation, etc."

You need to get an editor, your grammar is in some serious need of help.

Do you mean 'bruises'? As in more than one 'bruise' [a painful black-and-blue mark on flesh]?

Your concepts are valid, but their treatment leaves much to be desired--simply reporting events does not make for entertaining, thought-provoking, empathy-invoking prose.

You are good at telling a story, I enjoy reading them.

UncertainT