All Comments on 'Cinnamon's First Date Ch. 01'

I wonder if more than one penis for 8 balls :)

Get some help with the spelling

This is really good. But it is spelled "SHE" not "SHI". If not for that error over and over it would be great. But that makes it so hard to read.

Perhaps I should have put in a disclaimer that Cinnamon is using intersex pronouns (shi/hir). So the people who are telling me it's spelled wrong hundreds of times by some CRAZY FLUKE both me and my editor missed can stop now. 😁

I'll admit, the pronouns broke the rhythm of the story for me at first. It felt frustrating, and I wondered to myself why you didn't just use she and her as most writers I've encountered when writing trans or futa characters. But then it clicked- your character doesn't identify as a she and her, they identify as a unique gender. You would be simplifying and misrepresenting the identity of your character with she and her. Once I got that, and once I got a few pages in and my brain accepted shi and hir as pronouns, the story flowed nicely. I have a feeling your rating will get much better for the chapters to come as it'll be readers who have adjusted to the pronoun usage.

Very very veeeeeeery promising ! Please keep up the good work ! ;)

I'm really looking forward to seeing where this goes

I know it's been a while since first chapter has been posted, but I'm still really hyped for a following chapter, I love Cinnamon ! ;)

I just read this story and I love it; I wish I could date Cinnamon too :_: Really hoping for more awkward cuddles, dates and, ummm ahem, *things*