All Comments on 'City of Love'

Magnifique.

Sweet, romantic, and hot! 5 stars

5 Stars. Wonderfully written, it took me a few seconds to dust off my French, but you definitely have a gift for writing, his could easily been the start of a novelette. Pease keep writing, I'll keep following your stories.

Unless Paris moved to Australia, it's still winter in February, summer clothes? really? Background missing, hints at pictures but no details, comes off as prearranged.

Good story. But stick to English. "Ma frère"??? "En Paris"???

Wonderful and beautiful story. O love that he was able to impregnate his sister, as a brother should. This story so reminds me of so long ago when my sister and I, in love with each other, were able to finally make love and bring a new life into this world, followed by others. Tha k you for this such sweet, sweet story!

Excellent!

Good story over all but the narrative was a little too "eloquent" for the subject matter, so to speak. I get you were trying for the literary effect, but some of the cryptic crumbs you left us with unanswered plot lines were more annoying than fulfilling. 4*

What's a brother for if not to love his sister

Excellent, indeed!

Most restaurants in France are service compris, so the kind of tipping you do in the US is not normal for France. The wait staff are paid better and a tip is built into what you pay.

If you're going to use French, please use it right. It would be mon frere, not ma frere. Ma is feminine and frere is masculine.

Minor points, but they take a person out of the story if they know.

Author is a word wizard!

(1/26/2023) This was beautifully romantic and erotic with a perfect ending. I fantasize about a tender happily ever after for them living in Paris. Five stars and on my favorites list of course. Sorry, Barry, it was meant to be.

Covid is a crutch for a lack of background setup. 1 star.

Is incest legal in France....they shouldn't have a problem then

"Let me warm you up mon amant français." was said by MC to his colder sister so it should have been "Let me warm you up ma amante française."

I was waiting for a line that said they were carrying on the relationship that started when they were much younger in their teens but without that it was still a beautiful story. I always try and project characters into the future and wonder what that would be like for them. Just an old romantic, that's me.

This needs a follow up story

Versailles... not Versay.

Amazingly written and HOT!!!

.... and fill her, as a pregnant woman deserves from her man.

Very hot, quite good

Good luck to them

BUT why the French words with no translation???

If you're going to use words from another language then you should put the translation to the words not everyone can speak another language as far as the story goes you should have wrote a part 2 exploring the love that both the sister and brother has proclaimed for each other and how they explain the pregnancy to Barry and there family if they even do or does she just break up with Barry and move to France with her brother the father of her unborn child so many questions that you haven't answered the sudden ending hurts the story

It's a good story, and it's hot. I agree with the posters who said the diction was excessively erudite, you know. As an example, I had to read the paragraph about him coming inside her twice before I figured out that's what happened.

I thought the use of slightly incorrect French was okay, since the characters weren't native anyway.

The biggest problem I had was that part of the story seemed to be missing. On page 2 it mentioned her having sent him naughty photos earlier, but I read every word of the story and didn't see anything about this before. And when it was mentioned, it was as though the reader should know what he was talking about.

4.5 stars

That was lovely and quite erotic. I felt like it ended too soon though. I don't condone cheating at all but I got the sense she really wasn't happy with Barry and was already in love with her brother and had been for a long time, so I can at least understand her; not like she just hooked up with some random guy. Still, it's like breaking the law - even if your reasons are just, it's still viewed as wrong and punishable. She should have broken up with him on the phone then went with her brother if my perception is correct.

I wish it had a follow up where she comes back to her brother, moves in, has their child, and lives happily ever after. I'll just assume that's what happens.

Nice story. You should include translations in [brackets] so non-French speakers can enjoy the story too.