by BotoxandB52s
Nicely done, particularly for a first published story. Good pacing, nice descriptive language. Sexy! I really hope to see a follow-up. The abrupt ending left me, like Mariah and Chelsea, craving more.
Very good start to what I’m sure many here hope will be many more chapters about the love/hate relationship between Mariah and Chelsea.
First story! Awesome dude! You simply must continue. And if you have other ideas floating in your head, put them on paper. You definitely have talent. Five.
Jedd
Very well written. Great character development and I hope there is a part 2 Very soon.
I know how Chelsea feel... you really leave it here? I was about to cum!!!!!!!!!!
What the f$#@ was I reading? I feel shame because I know same sex stuff is a perversion and affront to nature..but as a male picturing two women going at it..it's arousing. My emotions battle with my morals, rationalizing over this turmoil only leads to more dissent. For I realize, temptation is a force to be reckoned with. If I ever do go down I hope my humanity in the past is enough to cancel out this corruption.
Anon who posted the religous bullshit comment, respectively, go suck your sky daddy's dick
1.Yeah a catharsis on the comment section is not the best place.
2.No need for insults.