All Comments on 'Clueless Joe'

Great story

Apart from the implausibility of certain situations and the behavior of certain characters, I feel as if I've read this same story many times before, with the same standards.

The false son is kind, naive, highly intelligent and the key element on which the success of the family business depends. This son is betrayed, used, belittled and humiliated to the detriment of his brother, who is taller, stronger and more handsome, but turns out to be a moron, incompetent and irresponsible, yet is entrusted with the management of this same company.

The nice son runs away, then destroys the family empire, because even if they existed before him, they're all idiots.

Although well-written, this story resembles many others on this theme and lacks originality.

A great story. AAAAAA++++++

Though this story has been done before with only a few basic differences, this one struck a chord because the disrespectful Sam also got a severe dose of reality. I also felt that the idea of Joe being sired by a stranger was not common to most of these family empires crash stories. There was enough novelty to give it 5 stars.

Another great story SunshineMan , I enjoyed it a lot and look forward to the next!

Good story.

How sweet the revenge!

5

Good story. 5*

1 star should have been 5 but, you kept alternating between Tidal and Tindal was becoming distracting.

Well written and as franceman said, I've read this storyline before.

Good story. I would have liked to know what his ex-Parents and Ex-brother and Ex-Son and Ex-Wife say about him 5 years later when the see him return?

Should have let the Bitch whore, her bastard son, and the most miscreant and vile parents one can have.

Oh, what about Eric you ask. He is fucken narcissistic brainless whose dick prevent blood going to his undeveloped brain

Good variation on a theme.

I enjoyed this one!!!! 5 stars

Great tale. Lots of subtle repair. thanks

I am giving a 5 bark (oops, star) rating. Started sad but ended up with laughter (on my part). Damn great story, thanks.

Well done 👏👏👏👏👏

Lost a point with the stupid financial shenanigans that definitely would have engendered a lawsuit and garnished wages for the rest of his life. Otherwise an interesting take on a well worn theme. Now I’m going to check out the rest of your stories.

I think joe should have bought the family property and should have done a hostile takeover of the tindal then gone in and fired Eric and Edward in front of all the employees . Good story

Her reasoning made no sense.

It was good writing, but the lack of originality brought my score down a star. It's very similar to other stories on the site, and an almost word-for-word copy of Nuclear Family, by Other2Other.

I was going to give the story four stars. Then I read a review where the person was going to give you five stars and changed it to one because you kept changing from Tindal to Tidal. I have never given anyone one star and never will. The idea she was going to give him five stars but lowered it to be star because he sometimes called them tidal instead of Tindal, Gee horrible. Personaly I thought it was great

It was unfortunate discovering the parallels between this story and 'Nuclear Family' (Other2Other) that became more concrete as the story evolved.

Shame the MC didn't highlight his children to his ex wife further condemning her lack of support for her husband.

WOW 10 Big Blazing Stars for a Very Epic Story. The complete and Totally DEVASTATING humiliation of our Hero. LOL The Wife that claimed she loved him so much kept returning to his brother for "Rough" and "Humiliating" sex, even though she claimed to really love her husband. Whoa, "Clueless Joe" was destroyed in everyway a man can be destroyed but came out smelling like a rose in the End. I Love Happy Endings! Great Job writing this epic tale of destruction. Truly EPIC. Thks, Buster2U

So ridiculously over the top I had to give it 5*! JBOL

Let me see if I got this all straight.

>After two blissful married years we decided to start our family.

>It was after his 15th birthday that the relationship between us started to fray.

>So, I was dumbfounded when I heard my brother telling Sam that he was Sam's father and he had regularly fucked Carol for over 17 years.

>Six months later (and after the divorce was final), the relationship with Micki D was wonderful.

Five years later.

>Carol had to relinquish her principal position as she had lost the respect of staff, students and school board.

>Sam seemed to be sent home quite often for fighting. It's difficult to keep from fighting when his classmates kept referring to his mother as "Lassie the Wonder Dog".

>Tidal Mfg's financial position took a toilet like swirling dive after I left. (Who the hell is Tidal Mfg.?)

>Eric and Sam left town as they began new careers as used car salesman and burger flipper.

Now as I have said in past comments, I am not a math major, but....

If Sam was 17 at the beginning of the story, he was most likely starting his senior year in high school. It took more than a year before John "found a file of Carol fucking Eric and had the desire to avenge both his and my cuckolding". So why was Sam still getting in fights over his Mom? For as long as it took to get to to the end of the story, it kind of fizzled out.

I would have came up with something more creative than car salesman and burger flippers, but fun read regardless. There’s been some similar stories here over the years and, having been in a family business, enjoyed most of them. 4.5*

Simply wonderful!!!! I know what it means to be the oldest and a family supporter only to have my dad give my brother the family fortune of over 1 million. The reason is my brother's love of money vs. my love of family. No, I was not a gambler or in debt, just an engineer for an Aircraft company. I still love my family. In short, I still love my brother, but I buried my love of my dad with him six feet deep.

I had to stop reading after he overheard the conversation b/w his brother and supposed son. Is there a word for cliche on steroids?

LMAO. The students barking like dogs gave me flashbacks to the movie Porky's. Thanks.

Boys in the highschool were arrested for showing pornography They were charged as adults and went to prison for 5 years as well as placesd on sex predator list Carol lost her job with the school but sued the school district for 1o million dollars for firinjg her for private videos dSchill district lost big time State looked into the cayman transfer as CFO. and ruled it illegal Clueless Joe in his anger had to pay back to the company all losses fro money not available as well as serve 3 years in prison His new wife dicovorced him but who cares he was clueless Joe

pretty good

I think it should be in the "Humor & Satire" category.

Good one.

5 stars

Seems like a conglomeration of several other stories here.

Vugar, mean and contrived.

Interesting chain of events. Especially since Joe came out ahead.

Excellent 5 stars

Not bad at all.

Joe bankrupted and destroyed a company and there wasn’t one lawsuit? He defrauded them, committed wire fraud, accessed lives of credit and you think he wouldn’t have been in jail? The courts and the IRS would hsve done down on “Clueless Joe” like the hammer of God!

You think his family ducked him over? Just wait until the Alphabet Agencies run a train on him, his ass would be so gaping, you could park a bus in it, and then they would force him to pay back every dime with i ready!

And that would have made this story fantastic. Because if you’re going to write a story about morality, then it applies to everyone, not just a few.

A bit of plagiarism? It is fair to say there are only so many plots and so maybe that's the reason.

Better ending... one evening after everyone had left the school Carol was going to her car when four masked me approached her. They threw her in a van and took her to an abandoned house. By the time the night was over she was barking like a dog, a bitch in heat to be exact as they took her over and over.

Great!

I enjoyed his revenge, and how he absolutely destroyed everyone that betrayed him.

Best of all, he got a loving family of his own at the end.

5* obviously.

In this endless flooding of fempov cuck-raac unrealistic fantasies, a good BTB always deserves the full prize: 5 stars. Maybe, somehow a bit flat.

Has been done before and done much better. 1*

Well written. Some plot holes but I cannot say I am not guilty of that too.

Some editing errors: Eric/Erick and others.

Decent story, but the trope of the people involved just so happening to spill ALL of the details of the affair during the time the slighted person just so happens to be there is overplayed and unrealistic. It would have been more believable for him to catch a snippet and then discover the rest through investigation. 2*

Yes simulat to others in the genre but still a lot of fun just the same

Scores 5/5 for sheer entertainment

Same old, same old. Nothing new or interesting here. Been done hundreds of times before, most of them the same.

Why does it seem that so many of the newer writers have no imagination whatsoever. They find a storyline that's been beat to death and mangle it even further.

Well, honestly this is one where the reconciliation would maybe have been appropriate… Carol is portrayed as a someone weak with a psychological issue that was manipulated over a long term by multiple predators. There are shades of gray in most of these stories and while not blameless … somewhat a sympathetic character…

"I needed to assess my entire situation." - What's to assess? You've got a recording of everything you need to know.

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NORMALLY, I'd love the son that I raised as my own, but knowing that he KNOWS I'm not his bio-dad, and has no respect for me, he'd be dead to me.

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"Inspector Clouse Au" - Inspector Clouseau.

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"However, I need him to keep me from going insane." - Having sex with your own husband can't relieve the stress?

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Why would he put stuff he wants to keep in Sam's car?

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If Sam was uninsurable, how could he drive? It doesn't matter if the car is insured or not, if he got stopped or in an accident, he'd be in trouble as an uninsured driver.

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"Because Carol was fucking him for 17 years." - Also, they told Sam, and didn't discourage his disrespect towards Joe.

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"I found out that he was never as good a lover as you" - Yet she continued to fuck him for 17 years?

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Could have done without the money shenanigans. He might have had legal access, but he could still be liable for malicious actions.

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@franceman, while I basically agree with your analysis, while the company was successful before him, they weren't elevating incompetents simply because they were the "real" sons.

The first 16 comments here all say that this is a great story. It's not; it's very average all the way thru. Average with almost no originality and no writing talent. Way too over the top characters, with almost a cartoonish characterization to them. Following the template for the BTB LW crowd doesn't constitute good writing. A very generous #3.

Was a good and fun story to read and was kind of hoping the good guy would win in the end

I vacillated between four stars and five. The last bit swung it to five stars. Pretty good tale.

JPB

Full woofs for this one.

Not bad. But there is s one portion of the story in the beginning which strange plausibility. He just finished finding out that his brother has been fucking his wife for 17 years and his son hates his guts and is not really his son.

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So the very day he finds all of this out ... out he has sex with his wife ....like 6 hours later?

dude come on

Five stars for an amusing, well-written read.

Nicely done. I really enjoyed the whole "clueless Joe" theme, which has been done before. Yes, there was a few small holes but it was an good read overall... All the characters were nicely done, the destruction of family/business was fine, and Joe's triumph complete. 5 stars for a job well done.

3 stars and yes, you should not have gone into any financial details - they detracted the focus from the story.

Carol and Eric walked IMO. No burn for 17 years of cheating? Ridiculous. The kid needed to burn the worst and there was not even a mention of his fate...

About “slutster” … Since it’s applied to a female, wouldn’t it be “slutress”.

I can suspend disbelief with the best of them but this stretched my ability to breaking point. I get the author's pre story comment that in a world populated by eight billion this could be a true story somewhere but every time I managed to process and come to terms with an utterly ludicrous premise the author managed to come up with something even more absurd. Then just as the story seemed to be rallying to become something credible we were regaled with the preposterous vomiting scene. Please, nobody vomits because of something they ate years ago! Sorry but this one was a miss. JR

Applause for a well-told and very entertaining story! 5*!

I really enjoyed this story! 5/5 BRB

Good story except changing his name to Donan seemed a little creepy.

Not one of your better ones in my book.

9.5 stars out of 5. I took off half a star because I feel he should have held out for not returning ANY college funds (being he had the fuckers over the barrel as far as filing for adultery and embarassing them). Otherwise, an absolutely perfect BTB with a happy end.

It would have been a better story if the characters didn’t offer up more than any real person would. It was laughably outrageous. “Yeah, we paid you less because you’re so important to us and we didn’t want to pay you what you deserved.” “Yeah, I fucked your brother because I craved being humiliated.” The MC, of course, finds a convenient video of his wife barking like a dog while being fucked by his brother. The tale lost a great deal in the confessional when the smallest word from the MC led to a barrage of insane self destructive confession. I liked the concept, not the presentation. It lacked any semblance of reality, throughout. The sense of reality creates the pathos.

Hilarious fun.

If Edward and Sally wanted a grandchild, why not wait for Eric to get married and provide one?

Good story, not sure how Joe could have even survived after what his family did to him. Too bad Jim kicked Eric in the balls after he throat punched him, he might have suffocated? Jim went total Nuclear ☢️ on his loving family, probably it was good that his DNA was Edward. Also enjoyed the revenge John Brown did to Eric, that town seems very dangerous for Eric…..

The biggest revenge is the death of the Tindal empire and Joe buying them out ……. Liked how Jim changed his name Donan. Hope Tim isn’t his DNA Dad?

Thanks for writing…….. 5⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Sorry, but this storyline seems very similar to another I've read, but unfortunately, I don't recall the title or author of the other story. This story is entertaining, but the big reveal seemed a bit abrupt.

An interesting take on the family business dependent on the the son they are screwing over. This time he figures it out 17 years later. Nicely scorched earth.

Absolutely fantastic story, Sunshineman!!! Thank you for posting!

Brilliant story. Thanks for a great read. 5 stars.

Nice but wished his ex family found out about his success after they sold the business

What happened to the next part of Faithful? It ended with to be continued, and that was three years ago 😡

It HAS BEEN done BETTER by other2other1 in his nuclear family series!! In my opinion and my opinion ONLY, ALL you did was take parts of his nuclear family series and plagiarize them!!! MINUS 100 stars!!!

The outcome was a bit over the topic, but fun! The best revenge...

Ma and Pa Tindal were quite a pair of idiots to hatch that harebrained scheme. Why not just find a suitable unrelated brood mare for Eric?

Just okay. Three stars ⭐️.

One for the good guys 5*****

An interesting, if uneven variation on a fairly often presented theme on this site. While I wouldn't go so far as another commenter and call it "plagiarism", I would say that it's damn close to the original. Still, I was entertained, and the writing was fine, so, I'll go four stars.

Great story, Loved it. more please.

4 * but the intro was unrealistic.

Didn't find this story appealing at all, actually pretty dumb.

Grate flow of the story. No death dealing revenge. While keeping the business alive. Just rewards to the cheating family.

Great story. 5*****

I would have liked the ending better if his ex-wife found out that he wasn't infertile and had a son, realizing that his mother and father had lied to her about him being infertile....making her realize even more how she had been duped and how badly she had destroyed herself.

The problem with this story it is a clone of another story written here. Plus the ending was rushed. Nothing original and mostly copied .

Sweet, sweet story.

I read a similar story I think year ago and it also had a similar BTB ending where the aggrieved son/husband destroyed the family company. But I'm sure the similarity is just a coincidence.

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I enjoyed this quite a lot it somtimes stirred up anger in me in some parts. Nice work @Sunshineman2019. Thanks.

Absolutely predictable. Why bother. 1*

Unfortunately, the story is rife with errors, including the hoot-worthy “Inspector Clouse Au.” But a careful editor would do little to inject emotion into the story. In a sense, it read like the outline for a story that had been fleshed out a bit. The events (similar to those found in many stories here) should have evoked a strong emotional response, but failed to do so for me.

sbrooks,

why,

I find it hard to believe you think your rhetoric is helping anyone. It is not constructive criticism. That MUST be your little secret fantasy to get off on.

I read the identical story by another writer

It was okay. MC should have gotten a recording of it all and then sued Eric for 17 years of child support. If he owned the the patents he should have immediately stopped Tindal Mfg from using them.

Faithful?

Just finished your alternate ending to Faithful, at the end it said "to be continued." How is that coming along?