All Comments on 'Coffee and Claire Pt. 01'

Very good start

Good start. Nicely timed cliffhanger. Condolences on the death of your wife. Anxious to read the next installment(s)

I like where this story is going but. I'd like to make a small suggestion.

When you are writing dialog between two people, normally you should start a new paragraph when the speaker changes. As it is, your paragraphs are quite long and the reader has to be alert to the change.

I look forward to your next submission,

First story!

4

Good start. This hits home as a shy biologist

Very good start. Anxiously awaiting PT 2.

I can hardly wait to read more! Please don’t let this be your last submission!!!

Why didn't you finish this part more? Sorry only a 2 as a result.

Starting life as a wonderful love story. It helps that I used to know Buckden well some 50 plus years ago. Indeed, my sister married there about 60 years ago.

Nicely written and building up a story that I want to hear more about. I hope it isn’t too long.

Great story so far...5*