All Comments on 'Coffee with a Creampie'

He was back and forth between alpha and beta, between strong and weak, between confident and worried -- without any clear character arc. She was two-dimensional, not enough character development. And one of your paragraphs ended with a period, followed by a .pl. (You really need an editor).

I liked the overall direction and shape of the story, but it needs an overhaul. 3 stars.

Also the verb tenses kept changing from present to past tense. very distracting.

A pretty hot story, needed some editing though. I didn't know message oil was edible though? Anyway, will there be a repeat performance?

Did the friend ever stop by??