by popup1313
Yummy. I wish that he wished for a mischievous Bi feminine at heart Crossdresser like me :-)
Lovely story.
Jo (JoAnne)
seriously you don't need to write so many 'Dale's' out. It really distracted me from the the story. Nearly every sentence it was 'Dale did this...or Dale did that' When he was alone, there was nobody else so obviously it was only him there. In one 11 line paragraph, you write Dale 10 times. Try to think of other words you can start a sentence with.
Yea i think you should add something in about getting a physical makeover, that would be so sexy.
I kinda have to agree with the whole "Dale" this and "Dale" that. It's great that you are writing, and sharing, but try to broaden your horizons a little.
I've always fantasised about having the ability to control anyone. Your story had me hard in seconds, thank you.