All Comments on 'Come for Breakfast'

She and Brad both deserve to die.

That got silly rather quickly! You started out well, but then I got the feeling you got a little carried away with one hand while typing with the other.

"Stab me with your fucking horse cock you big dicked bastard!" has to be one of the top ten funniest lines of dialog I've ever read on this site. I'm not sure if you meant it to be, but I couldn't suppress a loud laugh when I read it.

It's your first story, and your writing shows some promise. Keep working at it.

There were a couple typos; if you can find an editor that would help. But overall it was a hot stroke story. I loved the decision point! I hope you continue to write :)