All Comments on 'Coming Clean Ch. 03'

Tyler=Kyle, Mary=Marlene

I really enjoyed the story other than this minor distraction. Great job!

Guess what happens when you start a project only to finish it several months later? You do something stupid like forget the name to one of your characters. Sorry about "Tyler," everyone. He'll be back to being Kyle from now on.

Sooo...who the hell was Tyler??

Good story. Very hot. You do need an editor. Missing words from your thought pattern. The bigger issue, is you changed the name Kyle to Tyler.

Still looking forward to the next chapter

Got thrown off when Kyle's name changed to Tyler.

Who is Tyler? Gotta keep the names straight . . . .

FRECKIN' AWWWsome !!!!!

1/2 a story and 100% tease. Nobody likes a tease..... FInish the story before you submit it!

Every chapter of this story so far is really hot and well written, but the others are right, too need to check names. Kyle morphed into Tyler and at one point Brenda was talking to herself.

Can't wait for part 4

One of the best mother son series I've read. Like the gentle pace of it which has given you time to develop the characters. Really looking forward to the next instalment. Please don't get them doing everything in one night and maintain the gentle pace of the tale. I always think it a bit unrealistic when characters do anal etc on their first njghts together.

Wow...

Just wow.

Please don't take too long to write next chapter. Please don't put swap seen or lesibien seen.

In my opinion, this is truly an impressive masterpiece of sensuous, erotic and incestuous story-telling. I loved the plot, the slow pace, and how the story unfolded. I appreciate your gentle wording and your empathetic protagonists. To me, you are a very talented writer and I'm looking forward, to your next sensuous incest stories. Thank you for writing such delightful stories. Cheerio.

Kyle? Tyler? WTF? Who is going to be her son next chapter?

Exceptional - what a neat story! You draw such wonderful word pictures. Brilliant group of characters and interesting plot. Thanks for writing this story. 5++ Stars. I am lovinig every minute of thie series.

if you had an editor this story would be great but I just can't get through it. Once Kyle became Tyler I just skipped to the comments so I could let you know how much it took me out of the story. while it wasn't the first time its happened, it's just the straw that broke the camel's back.

Great story. You must know someone who would proofread though?

Well thought out, and could do with a bit of editorial assistance. The underlying plotline is interesting. It just has a detailed description that could have gone smoother. When Tyler sprang out of the blue, I could read no further. The story may be wank material for a few, but it lacks depth in the narrative description.

This is not to discourage you from working on your stories.