All Comments on 'Coming Home from the Army'

This was written well but just too short. I'd like more build up before the sibling intimacy. Well it was good enough for a 3. Not everyone is as keen on character development as I am so should score well.

Definitely need more.

Fantastic story, can’t wait to read more

You are off to a great start! This has no limits. His sister, his sister and friend, sister and mom, just mom, all three, a regular harem that he impregnates.

Fellow service member here...would love to hear more of this story! Really hot...don't limit yourself to Sis... :)

She messaged your prostate in your supposed sleep? Do you even know how that is done?

Can you bring Lindsey into the action as well

Morevb2

more more more please.

Cool story

I've read a couple of your entries now, and I think you have some good foundations for stories but they truly need some attention from an editor. The writing lacks flow, development, and overall feeling. Good start, keep writing, but don't hesitate to seek help where it's needed.

Can't wait for part two.. what fun!

Don’t continue

This could be a very hot story in following chapters. A couple of pages is usually a good length to read.

This could be a very hot story and I would love to read more.

Can’t wait to see where this goes!!!!!!!!

Can't wait ! Great story

Great start. Have to know what happens next!!

more of this story please

Wow horny sister so hot so far can’t wait to read more

.love to hear more

I’d recommend slowing down the pace. You have a hot sister and she demands our attention. Let us all savor the moments.

Really hot start. I'm hoping you tie in the emotional connection between the two siblings. Is it just two horny people or is/was there more there. What's the long term consequences? Where does Lindsey fit into the story, Mom? Lot's to cover - you better get writing! LOL

Great start!! Can’t wait for more!!!

Nice. I had similar happen but it was step-sister

It's a good start, but it's to short you need to write more then one page.

You can’t leave us hanging

Hopefully there's a threesome in the future

Awesome start can't wait to read more!

Very good!!! Hope to read the pay back time!!!

More...please!

please continue

Looking forward to reading more.

How can I read more?

VERY SEXY HOT BLOW JOB FROM SEXY SISTER !! SHE ALSO IS A VERYGOOD SISTER NOT MNDING EVEN TO LET. BROTHER JAKE WATCH LIZZY SHOW HIM HER HAIRLESS NAKED PUSSY UNDER HER WHITE PANTIE !!

NOW THAT IS A HOT WELCOME FROM HER !!

please write more of this story

Hmm the comments I seen says more however I can't help to wonder if it is friends of the writers in real life making the comments and pushing the negative comments out of view and that being the reason why this was never finished cause while a blow job is a sexual act and it was his sister that gave it to him I just wouldn't have called this a incest story for there was no sex involved just a blow job