All Comments on 'Conversation Overheard'

I like it, reading your story was a great way to start the day.

I am a male but this is a good story. After all in all cheating stories most have a male doing the cheating. Nice to read a wife's side when she isn't the one cheating.

im glad to see a female LW character that is less than perfect, w/ a job, and act like a normal person. nicely written, good plot.

to were a bit to much risk, but then one can be intelligent and stupid at the same time. She took a long time to realize that her husband was only playing her, but then stupid is stupid. Her return of her funds showed her intelligence coming back. What she did not do was press charges on both men for conspiracy to commit fraud and theft. Taking private funds, married or not, without permission is theft! At the very least she should now own her husbands contracting firm.

<p>For a Medical Doctor the character seemed too <i>cavalier</i> about casual sex. More than the average person would have thought someone who would know worse case senerios would be. Sorta like a Dentist talking about all the sugar treats they ate all the time, and then later walking back into work and never letting what they knew bother them. I mean all the pictures I see on the Dentist wall for weeks makes me stay away from sugar sweets when I visit. I couldn't imagine being a medical doctor and knowing what I spent years learning, and then would still be that cavalier about it. But again, thats just me too.</p>

<p>But having said that, I thought it was a very good story. The wife midway through the story went on instincts, and based on that, was able to keep from being totally taking advantage of. She was a little sader about what happened in her life, but refused to be a victim to let her enjoy a fantasy created by her husband. I liked the way you let her stand up for herself.</p>

<p>Nice Story (^_^)</p>

-Risq

Well done story, keep up the good work

I loved your story and it goes without saying that one could tend their own garden before someone steps in. In this case, it was Tom and his buddy that tried to rip of Sally, but she was just too sly for them. Yes, men can be bastards, but women can be bitches too and try to do the same thing. I know, I was once married to a money hungry bitch.

Enjoyed the story though I thought that Sally characterizing herself as a mere housewife was a bit much. She was a professional earning a fine living, residing in an upper-class neighborhood with essentially no financial worries. Her low self-esteem is her big problem, and it's interesting watching her battle against it through the story. Thank you for writing.

...from the usual fare. Well written with an interesting take.

but I was perplexed by one thing. Sally referred to herself as a three-time loser in marriage.. but I never specifically saw where she had been married before. Did I miss something, are we to assume she was twice divorce when she met Tom, or is there some other angle?

i enjoyed this one, thanks.

Having a female character who isn't brain dead.<BR>

Refreshingly different - thanks.

she has grit. She's not a genius, but she knows it and it's okay. This is the rare story where a character actually evolves and the author is able to show it happening. It got me past the occasional usage errors, and even those seemed appropriate to the character. Good job. Best, Ken

There is nothing worse than frumpers being sucked in by a writer claiming fat is 15 pounds over weight and plain jane is an excuse for stupid in glowing feedback.

I had concluded by the first paragraphs which rambled on about money which made no sense mixed with sex that you are shallow beyond belief. (For the record, slutty is not a single woman as only married women can be sluts. Single women out with Lee are "trampy".)

That in reality of language makes me wonder what kind of West Indies diploma school you got your degree as your spelling is horrid along with your grammar.

Examples:

There was more assets, savings, stocks, bonds, even some silly casino win that was cash every year in the form of a huge check.

Frank was easily much more physical than my Tom, and he did tend to create a presense in any room

Correctly, English states There WERE more assests.....even some casino win which paid out a cash dividend every year...

To: to create a PRESENCE in any room.

Even doctors know spell checking as they are required on papers, but your professors were void of English.

Along with the other flaws others have already related, your story does not match what you state you are and the story was in dire need of continuity as the stupidity of the character evaporates when she is on the money trail then she looks like Marc Rich.

I gave you a 25, but in sitting here in the Oprah factor which cons low self esteem women to "be on Oprah's side" as she is one of them is the same thing you pulled and is just as revolting, so it goes to the big double 0.

Have a nice day.

Unlike the "Oprah" nut that posted that run together drivel, this is an easy to read story.

Enough left unsaid to allow the reader to associate, with a mix of reality.

Not bad for a new writer, not bad at all. Better than Oprah anonymous, obviously.

I really thought we were going to be into a wife swapping situation maybe even mini orgies.. But, unfortunately, it wasn't what the men wanted.. Well written, good read!!

Loved your story, the characters were very real. I enjoy a story were the spouse refuses to be a doormat.

...in spite of what she thinks. She figured out the problem and solved it successfully and maintained her dignity throughout the process. Interesting story. BTW most of us guys don't mind the extra 15 pounds at all - we greatly prefer that to the aneroxic look Hollywood and the fashion police ram down our throats.

Good story with believable characters. It was confusing at first trying to figure out why Sally was getting the money when Lee died. You can't throw screw balls at readers like that in the beginning. I found myself going back through the beginning to see what I missed.

Then the three time loser thing. Where did that come in? A simple statement about her previous marriages in the beginning of the story would have set that up so we can identify with her instead of going BACK over the story AGAIN to see what we missed.

Experience will sort out those issues in future stories. Good job.

Nice to see a person not falling for the revenge sex, even better since it was a scam. A little confusing at parts but well written and consistent characters. Keep up the good work.

Nice to see a person not falling for the revenge sex, even better since it was a scam. A little confusing at parts but well written and consistent characters. Keep up the good work.

Nice to see a person not falling for the revenge sex, even better since it was a scam. A little confusing at parts but well written and consistent characters. Keep up the good work.

she's a winner!

Very original story. It was not at all what I first expected.

lovely

A real story with real people and a twist at the end. Sally is no 3 time loser in my books, she is a real winner who kept her dignity while getting rid of a scumbag. Go Sally Go!

you will be fine.

i like the story. it not fluid, but it delivered.

. . . with an unusual twist. Thanks for bringing something different to the usual Literotica fare. The lead character might not have been the smartest in the world, but I think the author has a very interesting mind.

I LOVE a Happy Ending!

Just between you and me there is nothing wrong in not starting ‘from the beginning’ as some readers requested. The bible does, then every Encyclopedia and dictionary do – beyond that you can start anywhere you like. The reader may take his /her mind of the TV or any other multi tasking and focus on the reading alone - in doing so you would follow the best of the canonic authors none stares “in the beginning”. You always have to leave behind gaps – parts which the reader has to fill in by retrieving information if publicly available or by deducing or by assuming and most importantly by using the imagination. <P>

In my opinion there is nothing more tired then those stories which start with Let me introduce myself: I was born in Idaho… and then they go on to detail every main event in their life until somewhere in the middle of the text something relevant to the real story happens. <P>

I liked the fast pace intelligent narrative just fine. It assumed that the reader can gather the pieces together and create just enough background to allow for a credible character to be formed – you are economical in your writing. I can’t help wondering, could it be tribute to the always brief and to the point style of physicians and their short hand writing?

I really enjoyed this story.

Good work as always.

Your comment on the Not-so-loving Wives essay, led me here!

Thanks!

You're definitely going into my favorites category, really like the stories.

Always good to see the cheaters get the shaft in the end. This guy was a asshole and deserved all he got. And by the way i am male, but cheaters should never prosper, male or female makes no difference cheaters are slime. Thanks for a great story

I agree that it's great to see the cheater lose... So many women lose so much, never to get anything close to justice... and the action is also a bit sexy!

Very original; cute -- I liked it a lot.

Very enjoyable and interesting. Thanks for sharing.

Cheaters never win.

very clever, wellwritten and original.

somebody made a big mistake under rating her, TK U MLJ LV NV

Good job telling a tale with wry precision. There was something surgical about the way Sally sliced the men trying to do her in.

Although most people with money usually have safeguards in place. Well told tale of betrayal.

Get an accountant to deal with a decent amount of money. Two accountants (who don't know each other) if you've got real money! If Spouse wants to check up on them, OK! But if someone is marrying into a significantly different income level, the deal needs to be done without emotion. On BOTH sides! Openly and with clarity!

4*

...the good woman wins. She should have took the sack of shits $60K.

But this was a sad tale.

Would have liked a better ending for her.

Sally goes straight at Tom with her questions. How long have you been fucking Sara, what is Frank wanting? Then she says what all of those men should say in the Wife-Gets-Threatened-by-Whomever scenarios but don't get to say because the wives don't tell them and then end up whoring for the boss: Tell him to go to hell!

When Sally's husband doesn't sleep with her that night, she goes into situation analysis and then starts problem solving. Situation #1 – I am not sure of my husband: dealing with that ultimately reveals money issues. I do like the author's line: I realized I was in the uncomfortable position of not knowing for sure what I had for a husband. It just makes me smile while I say, “Hmmm.” but I love Sally's Joshua 1:9 line as in, “God's got my back, and if Tom swings on me, I'll swing right back and beat the brakes off him – “You owe me $20,000” -- my GIRL!

Haven't seen your work before, and I enjoyed this story. Plan to check out more.

Although this has a finished/ended feel,

there is Chapter 02.

See sidebar: Also In This Series.

Paul in Oklahoma

Hated it.

This is still a very good story from a good author. I like to see cheating Asshole go down.

Hey, Imsally,

Great story. Liked her to have done even better at the ending, but it was great how she handled herself - and those thieving, sucking men. We are not all that way, though, I'm no clean example. If it really happened this way, YAYY!!

If so or not, still a great story, Imsally

Jack

Where are the nit pickers?

Another good story. Thank you.

5*****

Keep it up

Now that was a decently thought out and nicely written story! Cant say that for many authors here.

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Well done. I would have preferred if she used her evidence to seek prosecution for conspiracy and fraud. She could afford the attorney fees, I doubt her dip shit ex husband could. Also, 15 pounds, on a woman of virtue and intelligence? Not a problem, Either she's being too picky or she's not trying. Lots of candidates in the medical world. Plain looking as toast, but very disciplined and intelligent people. That's the only flaw in your plot.

Thanks for the effort.

Good story

A really good story about burning a couple bastards.

Great...LP

Damn, it was better than I first feared it would be.

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