All Comments on 'Conversations'

Please stop the madness. It was obvious poorly written unimaginative and veeeeeeeeery predictable

background. Ok she was cheating on him for two years, how did he find out? When did he set up the sting with his friend Mike? How many times did Mike fuck his wife before the phone conversation? This story needed more.

You can't help but to tease us a little bit, can you?

Boyd

different fram usual but not really good Brit. Same level as many other here : just average. I'm sure you can do better, even with a theme we have seen here before, be it with different conclusions. You left yours open. If there's a follw-up, please make it better.

At least it's a bit different, to each their own.

I thought you were going to make him a wimp, but it all worked out in the end. I would have liked to have read about the gang bang and then showing her the video of her being a slut. Thanks for the post....Rich

Just not for me I'm afraid. But as I said nice try. I can see where you were going with this story but as TOS2 said it needs a bit more background.

With all the other comments. This is a nicely written little vignette. A snapshot in time that tells us everything we need to know. This is an excellent little piece. Well done.

only one getting anything is Mike.

Nice little tale and good for you for attempting something a bit different. Thanks for all the entertainment. The 100 was for the attempt at something new to you; it was an 80 but still a nice little tale.

that you leave out the punctuation. It really is important and is not all that difficult. It just seems that it's worth doing right.

This is a good start. I hope other authors will attempt something new in the genre as well.

... but it was certainly different.<p>It was a little rough going, at first, trying to keep up with the flow of the conversation (if one can call it that); but the reader was forewarned that this was, in a sense, experimental, so that was fair.<p>The subject matter was interesting. I didn't see the resolution coming until very close to the end.<p>I wouldn't want to read any more like this, but for an exercise in stretching the envelope, it worked okay.

Despite e.e. cummings notion of punctuation. It wasn't too difficult to read, although I wouldn't want to put up with a long story done that way. It is sometimes unclear on the first blush, who is speaking. In something this short, one can figure that out from the context.<br><P>

As far as the characters go: both rather hateful shits, who actually should be condemned to live with each other as punishment! LOL!

Hope we get a sequel.This needs to be finished.Thank you!

Very diffrent from the usual crap that seems to increase on this site.As one earlier comment said"you love to tease",but shouldn't that have benn "you love to Brit-tease"

Wasn't at all what I was expecting as the little twist at the end made it even better . . . looking forward to the next installment!!

...A best friend who actually is a best friend. Different -as you said. I wouldn't like it as a steady diet but an interesting exercise.<P>

She does come across as rather cold blooded so what he is about to do doesn't bother me any. But he's no prince either.<P>

Thanks for sharing.

As a 'dialogue only' experiment it was just fine.

I found this a refreshing change, and a new way of telling the story, it left me not only wanting more, but filling in the gaps for myself

who deserve each other.

ARE these women you write about?! The style got kinda confusing but managed.

nonsense

I may have rated this a bit too high, but it is a very entertaining little piece, told in an unusual manner.

It also proved that stories don't have to be dragged out endlessly. Thank you.

Damn you Peter, we're all adults aren't we? If you're going to get that upset every time I have a bit of fun, then there's not much future for our marriage is there? When she tell her husband this i agreed with anything you wanted to do with her. The greatest thing to happen to a cheating slut is to be set up like this. HAHAHAHA Bitch

It's starts as a Nici type of story : "accept my cheating, you have no other choice" (due to the record nubmer of feedback she recieved, I believe she deserves to have this type of story named after her). Only here, the wife ploy is aborted as the husband bypasses the wife in the plotting and schcheming deptartment...<P>

There is not much love lost here on both sides,so it feels more like a parody of the Nici story. In addition, for me the story was more like a quick sketch, tooo skeleletal to get us really involved and yet entertaining...<P>

Againn I get the feeling that for Btitease this is an under achievment. She can write something much stronger.

Totally blew me away. Never saw it coming, unique style.

Interesting if the guy dodges the bullet he is not a nice guy and if he takes it in the chest, he is a wimp. You can't win in literotica! Thanks for experimenting. In the first line we feel disoriented about who is speaking, but afterward everything is easy to follow.

what would you not love? Mikes stands to get rich later blackmailing both of them.

Great little revenge story. No wimp here. His wife showed and then him him that she would continue whoring around and he had no say. Well, he did, and he set played her as she had played him. She's worthless as a wife and he has a right to his future sexual pleasures as well. At least he will be divorced. I don't understand why any commenter doesn't see the justice in this story.. An I am "NOT" a torch the bitch type at all! This wife has no respect or love at all for her husband...

yep! fine read. i love it when a bich gets in the end.....

I want an ending...lol

I assumed it was a much more conventional "I'm recording your confession as we speak" story!

This isn't my cup of tea Brit. R.T.

Pretty hard to do when youve been Blind sided like that!!'.

Certainly different.

It had all the passion of a correspondence chess game. I appreciate the pushing the genre envelope with the untraditional presentation . Five stars worth in fact, it was very good.

Yet it would have been great if you let the husband's mask slip and show the agony, if only for a short period of time, a decent man would feel upon discovering his wife is a slut. This could have been a contender!

5 stars

If you are as old as me, you'll get the reference! If not, don't worry!

Nice piece of experimental writing.

True best friends stay loyal to each other. No slut can stop that. Not even a cheating slut wife. No pussy is good enough to break a true friendship.

Just....yeah.

Especially after telling him that he was screwed with any divorce action. I hate a willing cuckold and he refused to be one although he put up with it longer than I would have. Too easy to get her knocked off while I was out of the country. Of course, I'm an old man now, maybe I would have viewed it differently when I was 35 or so.

This one was pretty funny and well done too. Send me a snapshot of her face when she's served.

especially to the enemy council. TK U MLJ LV NV

S-H-I-T,,,,,,,, I think one word covers it well enough.

But cries out for a continuation.

Keeping secrets in a marrage is a bad idea. Keeping secrets between buds priceless. I could imagine another twist or three. Mike keeping Jane for another week yea sure. Maybe some consoling to help cope with the divorce, not after a gangbang.

Drugs to the gang bang, have her test positive for them, and she can forget about the children and "taking him to the cleaners". She will be out on the street, with supervised visits for an hour a week with the kids! Fuck her!

How about a part 2 please? The one where she finds out how she screwed up.

This is great as is, but, it would be better if it had a second chapter to go with it for after the gang bang and the court case after... Shame he wasn't taping the conversation.

good one but yes must be part 2 with destruction of Cheating bitch and husband find another lover pleasssssssss

should do so very quitely. TK U MLJ LV NV

There is nothing like the feeling of being betrayed. The best antidote is what is found in this story, a deeper, more complete and fulfilling betrayal. The best epilogue would be one where the divorce sails through, he gets the kids and the majority of the loot, the kids adjust well because mom had not been much of a mom for the past 2 years and everyone except mom lives happily ever after.

or is it four? I lost track.

I wonder if Mike is pulling a double-cross. Need a part 2 to see how it all shakes out.

...but I did like it! These ultimatums that we see in so many stories normally make me think, "Take the loss and walk." This solution made me smile.

Jane will get a shock when.she realizes that she has been well and truly.played.

What. keep it up!

Don't buy it

Over asap no real man is going to let himself be cuckolded 1 second longer than absolute necessary

Get sick of hard one cumming in pants watching another guy or guys screwing your wife. Throwing up yes total rage yes No Cucky shit

Never been done to me but just reading about makes my dick turn turtle

And

Wanting to help the guy neutering etc

Quit reading stories as soon as wimp cucky starts

Fuck Jane if she can't take a joke. Oh, wait, they have already, all of them. More fun from across the pond. Signed: BTW

That one can get editors help on this website. Get one!

Good surprise for Jane.

Prevents poor performance...."Surprize Janey"......

Despite someone else's comment to that effect.

I am wondering if this story was the inspiration for SleeperyJim's excellent series, 'Conversations'. If so, we, the readers with somewhat of a moral compass, thank you.

A well planned exit strategy.

I love it when an author doesn't upset my moral stance, so for that I thank you... so far. Obviously I am going through your story catalogue. I hope to not find any reason to stop reading, as I did with others.

Cheers. Another 5 star effort.

....what I think...

Again. Nothing quite like a story where the cheating bitch gets played for a fool.

I liked the idea of the = signs for the silences. But only because you ruled out a narrator or third person.

Entrapment.

Entrapment? A brilliant idea.

This is a very nice story of a husband getting revenge on his wife, One thing though. If he sleeps with her while he's waiting to gather his evidence, it all goes up in smoke as her attorney and probably the judge also will say that by sleeping with her with the knowledge of her cheating, he was giving approval of her actions, and receiving her favors also. LoL.

Like a few other stories, a "what happened next?" comes to mind as the story's unfinished.

Oooo...I can't wait for the burn followup! I'm not typically the BTB type, but sometimes they deserve it!

A bit hard to follow, the spaces inbetween discussions too much, story not complete. 2stars --Bob

Too funny. It never ceases to amaze me, that women fall for the bullshit, that men dish them. How many stories on Lit, have been about wifey falling “ out of love”;with hubby, when she meets her “ soulmate” who promptly dumps her, after she is divorced and single?

Women think, that he fact a man goes Gaga over her pussy, somehow means she has control over him. Men are creatures of habit, that do not like unnecessary strife in their lives. If an older car starts to give him trouble, he will dump it. But if it’s only minor trouble, he will continue to drive it. But sooner or later, he will make the decision, to rid himself of things in his life, that are high maintenance. The world is stocked, with 40-50 year old divorced women, who found that out the hard way!

5 stars.

Like to see the rest of the story

Ratings always suffer when there’s no follow through. Easy enough to understand though.

And then Mike told him he was loving the pussy too much and adios friend

Very novel story

Unoriginal and shit format. Take a writing class if you lack the technicals to execute what you were going for here.

You could do a hell of a lot better than that.

As dense as I am, I can see a few little problems that just might crop up in this evil scheme!

Some of the people- Mike, for instance, playing both sides. What's stopping him from flipping for the wife & telling the judge that her husband Peter not only accepted but planned for the wife's adultery? Same with Jane or other women that's helping her. Best thing would've been for Peter to record the conversation he had with his wife & use that. Too many conflicting parts/ people. And the story didn't continue to tell what happened. For all this, especially for the incompleteness, 2 stars. Bob

2 stars for not having quotation marks. Plus the space inbetween's a sign of poor writing. Too bad. Bob

This started out as an interesting story, but then--

1. Lack of quotation marks. Easy to follow here, but not an involved story. Also the mark of pure laziness on the author's part.

2. The unneeded spacing. All that's needed was a remark stating that one or the other's thinking about what was said or whatever. Also the spacing within the sentences (---). Used much too much. Unneeded in almost every circumstance. Same with the spacing between the phone call. All this, pure laziness.

3. Seemed like the author had an idea (which was good in itsself) for a story & rushed to put it on paper, reader almost be damned. We shouldn't HAVE to wonder who's talking (again in this story, really no problem) or if there's emotions behind the words, whether anger, annoyance, or none at all. It's the author's job to tell what we're supposed to feel.

4. Some of the words in the discussion either place wrong or not needed. "Just" is a prime example. "You really expect me to just give you the go ahead. Tell you it's ok to screw anyone you fancy behind my back and not complain. You think I'm simple or something? I'm not falling for that one --- no way." I don't think ANYBODY talks like that - US or UK. Also, them saying their names constantly- just doesn't happen in conversations. Once in a while, yes, but not nearly as much. Or the continued use of honey, sweetheart, etc.

5. On another note, there's Mike, who seems to be playing both against the other. Nothing on where he stands. Or if he warns Jane before her husband's trap appears. Nothing about HOW Mike came into the story. Even a sentence or 2 would be beneficial. But nothing. I'm realizing that this story is about a conversation, but even so, some things in the story just has to be included or the story is not completed.

6. Talking about completion, nothing about what happened (at the end) when Jane saw those guys - assuming she wasn't prewarned - or what happened or what she did. Nothing about what happened between Mike & Peter. A good story basically ruined by the above. A shame.

I had to give this tragically written piece 1 star. Most appalling, as commented below- the punctuation, again, mostly the lack of quotation marks. There was also hyphens all over where there shouldn't be. Even though this was to be a conversation story, some background insofar as emotion or what's happening during the breaks in talking would have been nice. The way it's presented, just awful. Likewise, the "response" of Jane at the time of, and after, the divorce would complete the story. It wasn't, and with the rest of what was left out, the story is not complete by any stretch of the imagination.

I'm also wondering how legal the gangbang video would be as Mike would be leading it and Jane wouldn't know any of the men, much less inviting them. Wonder if something called rape could be charged, even if he claimed no knowledge of those guys arriving. That's a small part (not that I think rape's a small thing at all!) of this terrible story. I've read other stories by Britease written and told hugely better.

I cannot believe the harsh criticism that the story has received so far. I thought it was interesting and I enjoyed the writing style. I think the plot was somewhat overused here in literotica and I personally think it would have been better to have introduced a double cross to Peter from Mike who may or may not have been prepared for. But that would just be my way of giving it a go to keep the plot interesting. (4stars).

I keep saying I’m not going to post comments anymore. But FFS. It’s a wank story you fuckwits. Most of you dead from the neck fuckers are septics anyway and don’t have a sense of humour. Is it surgically removed when you are drafted or are you born without? The guy is funny. If you don’t like, don't read.

These are falling apart for me as we do not see the fallout, which makes this have no ending and very lackluster.