by Nicequip
You're right, it's pretty ridiculous. But you tell the story well enough to "suspend disbelief." I keep getting pulled along by the plot and characters, (as thin as they are), with occasional pauses to bust out laughing my ass off. Very entertaining.
This story never gets old lol. Multiple reads and I still laugh my butt off. Hope you finish it someday.
Hilarious 😂. I actually cried laughing when Lori said, get Servpro because your princess just leaked all over this bitch! Brilliant!
I like it a lot and I'm curious where it leads to.
Well written with a solid structure. Perhaps the inner battle of Lori could be a bit more written out.
It's the first time I keep bursting in laughter reading one of those. Weird mix, but well done!
Well done ! I was a bit apprehensive at first but I really enjoyed it. The only suggestion I've got is that you might want to read it yourself again and do a spellcheck.
A few minutes in and I already want this Jason asshole to suffer a torture so extreme and humiliating, that even trying to fathom the totality would make me vomit in total disgust. Yeah, I hate bullies; sue me. Thankfully he gets what's coming to him in the most hilariously entertaining ways.
This is the best thing I've read in ages. The hilarity of the situations is just wonderful. I've laughed more reading this story than I have in years. And the revenge is beautifully sweet. Thanks for this gem.
"It's a bomb!" Fucking Jason man. That scene got me in hysterics. Fucking top-tier comedy gold! :) And him cheering, oh god, I can only take so much :D At some point I start expecting him to say more Arnold lines, like "get to the chopper!" I would have fucking LOST IT.
"I'm happy I didn't abort him!" Just what every child wants to hear from their parent. The pinnacle of praise :) Lori became my favourite character when she starting cheering with her rants. I do hope we see more of her. She will likely want a piece of her son's massive fuckstick.
I really hope he takes Beth away from Jason and she begs for his cock in all of her holes just like he did to the mom and sister. That would be oh so satisfying. Especially if she's a virgin like the sister was, but probably won't be after all this time.
"I've got to put a load in Mrs. Cooper." "At 4am?" "It's an emergency." "She's a thirsty bitch." Jeezus christ I haven't laughed so hard in years. The dialogue in this at times is just insane. I love it. Going to read part 2 now. I hope it doesn't end there!
Probably the most degrading, ludicrous, story I’ve read here. Mooooore!, please!
I'm not sure how I feel about this story. That being said, I'm reading every word.
Fucking masterpiece, I have never laughed as hard while hard as i did with this. 10 outta 10 would read/wank/laugh again
Just wow. Just wow. Holy fuck this was a great fucking read! Who cares about the erotic aspect of it. Just the story and progression..
Honestly have never laughed as hard or long as this made me, fantastic story!!!!!!
Enjoyed it. Can't wait until I can read the next part. Keep up the good work!
That story was awesome. I can't stand a bully and payback is a bitch. Great job.
I don't think I've laughed so much at any other story on this site. Bravo sir! 5 Stars
Really good stuff here. Hard to keep from laughing out loud at some of the dialogue. A, super solid 4 star story.
This is genius! 2nd time reading through and I giggled my ass off. Genius!
Fkkkknng lovdd it ! I am not saying this lightly. The only feedback I will give is your writing style , arcs etc are good keep working on them.
Absolutely one of my favorites! I found it to be insanely funny and well deserved punishment.
Absolutely one of my favorites! I found it to be insanely funny and well deserved punishment.
Insanely good, hilarious and hot! The characters are so well constructed, brilliant!
That was a great story. Hilarious with his son shaking pink pom-poms. The line with him hunting rabbits funny. When he went to the costume section I thought for sure he was gonna get Bugs Bunny or Elmer fud costume.
I'm seriously loving this but it's tagged as gay, and nothing remotely gay has happened..
Pure over the fucking top perverted madness, but it's so fucking funny at times! A great read!
Well there's getting your own back and really getting your own back and this is definitely the latter!
Third time I've read this over the past year or so. I still laugh. It's just so fun to read, for example, the lawn sprinkler dialog, just rotflmao. This is my favorite "fun" story of all time.
Fun read, and SO unexpected/rare-Mandy with a full bush-!, AND she's captain of the cheerleaders-!
got to be a unicorn in all of Lit empire
And Mandy's mom throws a hot fuck herself...guess her tits never went back down after she had the twins....
Holy Shit ... Awesomeness ...
SMART ... ABSURDIST ... GOLD ... Gold, I say!
At one point, I literally found myself rocked back in my desk chair holding my stomach laughing out loud while forced to clap (applause) with my feet ... because the sheer JOY could not be contained and had to be physically expressed (the ever present semi-to full-hardon just not enough to singularly encapsulate all the feelings this story generated within me).
This story makes me feel like a pervert, a literature/film connoisseur, and a trained seal all at the same time.
A protagonist being smart with a power... plodding, layered... extreme (yet soooo reasonable) ... GREAT ... the sports/team dialogue ... the absurd but supportive family atmosphere ... words cannot fully express it ...
I want to see this as a movie (a real film)... BUT I know it wouldn't be done justice today ... it would require the acting and production of mainstream productions and that hasn't happened since the late 70s ... IF this was written and filmed back in Tom Byron's youthful hey day ... It could have been a vintage porn iconoclast similar to the American Taboo series, Butterflies, That's Amore, etc.
Sir, WELL DONE ... KUDOS, to you!
Nearly pissed myself laughing and got a good old hard-on so thanks and keep up the good work.
I loved the mom's shit-talking and supportive-ness too, and how the cuck dad is so supportive with his football coach phrases lol. 'Dugan Dick Drop' was so cool.
This is genuinely hilarious - especially when the mom finds out and gets semi-involved (so far). It's such a great read, thanks!
"She got Dugan Dick dropped!" Best line I've ever read on this site lol 5 🌟 from me
this story has made me realize that I've been reading drivel erotica. the creativity and skill in this story are out of control and I wish there was anything on this level in the MC genre!
Great story lots of fun and hilarious. Your intro is spot on, and helped to set the tenor of the story. Appreciate the absurdity of it all, and I actually laughed out loud at the dad and sent to follow his dream of being a “Amazonian medicine man.” Can’t wait to read the next installment!
I echo the comments made below. This story is hilarious. Massively over the top and a total fuck-fest. Brilliant!
Well you did warn us that this story was way over the top. Talk about a fucked up story I pissed myself laughing in parts. “ Whoredrobe”😂😂. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️
Greg motherfucking Cooper is the funniest character I think I have ever read!
I think you’ve just lampooned almost every erotica trope there is and it was absolutely hilarious, I was crying with laughter at times, I mean - the “Whoredrobe”? Priceless!
I know it’s completely OTT, but I don’t care, 5 stars is well deserved for making me laugh, as well as the fact it’s really well written! Many thanks for writing and posting, cheers Ppfzz.
You know....
I know you said at the beginning that this was completely outrageous and unbelievable. But the truth is... if mind control was real I could see this actually happening. Or maybe I should say I could see Danny dreaming all this while he's knocked out in the woods!?! You get what I mean, even as unreal as this tale is you still manage to make it believable. Thanks for Sharing.
This is one of my favorite series, I’d love to see you continue with new chapters!
A hate a bully. Never really been picked on but always believed in fairness. Honestly the way you wrote this guy Danny I just want to kick his ass. If you are scared to take an ass whipping then get under the bed don’t ever come out. Can’t get stronger without some hurt
Not done reading but you didn’t have to make him a complete little bitch. Please don’t please. I’m asking politely please
Your disclaimer at the beginning was accurate and necessary. However, this story is without a doubt worth the read even with all the goofiness. Never have I laughed so hard, while BEING hard. My hats off to you sir, this story is a gem.
You're intro comments were spot-on. This whole mess was incredibly absurd, and utterly delightful! Those that are really in to the genre might feel differently(?), but I was laughing my ass off during the final wager at the Coopers'.
This is one of the most fun stories I've read in years. Scenes set up so well and the characters, especially the interactions between Jason and Danny latterly and then "retard" Jason and his dad. The women are not left out either. So refreshing, so over the top in parts I was too busy chuckling to take it all in. A re-read is a definite.
I really liked it. Something else entirely. You took your time setting the scene, the plot is well structured and does not go for cheap thrills, which would have been so easy.
If there is a downside to it: I could never wank to it, because the sex scenes are just too over the top and Danny is at least thus far a sociopath. But i think that might be intentional.
Anyway I will keep reading. Especially looking forward to Lori's development. Her character is the most intriguing to me, she is a bit ambiguous
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