All Comments on 'Corporate Model Ch. 01'

Attempting to read this is painful without speech quotation marks. That major problem detracts from your writing potential.

Look forward to the sequel where she models lingerie. Hope it is fully transparent and she gets fucked by the photographer. Future sequels with her doing other modeling would be good too.

Quotation marks aren't the only appropriate way to indiate a dialogue. A dash is equally correct and I had chosen to use that sign. I'm well aware that in anglophone literature quotation marks are more common, but that's still just a stylistic choice and not a rule.

Keep it going please.

Nice for starters