All Comments on 'Couldn't Quite Wait'

First, her so-to-be gets the word and dumps the slut. Then she dies in pain with no one by her side.

he finds out she is no virgin gets annulled and leaves the whore. no excuse she is probably knocked up to what a slut to fold like that.

This story has no value what so ever unless the writer explain or write how she can live on with herself after this.

Unless there is a follow-up and Bf finds out and gets him some while she watches.

It is like telling about a soldier who will land at Utah beach. Telling about his training and life. Then ending the story on June 5 1943 as the storm moves in.

Please note she was worried about Tonya not Tom.

Finnish the Damn Story.

The least you could do is finish the fucking garbage you wrote.

Ice fishing must be on the brain today

This story is about 40% there... Finish and you will get a 5 and if not a 1... I do believe you have an excellent start... While not as many women in today's world would match the young lady in your tale. Not too many years ago there would have been a higher percentage matching her thought process... Please finish...

Other than it just sucked. Please save it with a part 2 where the fiance finds out and calls off the wedding

A aerate writing. At least no WACCs. Her fiancé killed her that same day

No need for her to further betray, degrade, or lie to her fiance. It's already a 1.

Silly and Boring.

Gotta love shit like this, my wife had her "party" 2 nights before the wedding for her girlfriends to clean & straighten up and 2 of 5 brides maids got the boot by me because they got jailed for public indecency/drunken in public/resisting arrest that I wouldn't talk the Sheriff (family friend) or post bail for. Luckily my lovely fiancee had a backup plan of cousins and those other 2 never were back in as "friends" as I was an asshole. My bachelor party was tame but fun compared and I was pretty sober.

marriage is done before it started. someone will tell and the would be husband

will find out sooner or later. what a slut stupid tale stupid women

so young and so fucking stupid.

Some of you negative commenters are absolutely deplorable and should be ashamed of yourselves, acting as if being coerced into cheating is the absolute worst thing a wife can do, get some fucking perspective.

Cantbuymy, i've seen some of your other comments and you should be more ashamed then everyone else put together. You need help, get it.

shut the fuck up, go back to licking up your whore's cum trail. Stop being a pussy, you fag.

Author go back to the tranny shit that you seem to enjoy writing - cuz this shit really sucks.

I hope this author remembers that first beer ever drunk, cause this "story" was the result.

Good story. Not about him and her. It's about a woman without real friends. Very

good start .

I hope there's more story Yankee Dan . Confrontation with these so-called friends.

Terrible Tonya and her lesbian desires. Stacy and Asa not protecting her. Their in-

difference or even connivance. Then ,of course her own life changing moment. Does

she tell him and consequently both families about her moral failures.

Wow Y. D. you have just started this story and have enough for at least another 6 pages of writing, maybe 3 or 4 chapters. This has been done before and there's always room for another.

Gave you 3*s. Not much room to develop the characters in 2 pages. No mention of

her family. Where's her female relatives? Etc, etc. This is actually an opportunity

for you as the author.

Don't be discouraged by some comments. There is a lot of pain in many readers

here at the LW category. But you always get discerning and helpful comments also.

Boy, did I run my mouth,lol.

Good writing, I'll look for the next story. I am

AMerryMan

I hate this kind of shit story! I would hope the fiance finds out and burns her ass. 1star

Where did I say I was married? I actually spend some of my time getting wed women into bed for the fun of it. I half mis-spoke in my comment as I meant to say person instead of wife but the statement is still true.

Just because I don't think cheating is the worst thing in the world, i'm suddenly a fag, way to be mature. My one point is simply that there are a lot things in the world worse then cheating and I feel I need to question people that come to this place on Literotica when cheating is something they abhor, why subject yourself to it.

Now can we have a mature discussion or are you just going to use fag and whore because that's the limit of your vocabulary?

SCV

then he can just take her virgin asshole then get the marriage annulled maybe after some time if she gets everyone of her friends to fuck him he may come back and live with her..but then it will just be for the pussy ass and mouth...not to marry or have kidsyou do that with a woman that wont betray you...I think her future ex hubby should become a dancer also so he can get a chance to fuck some virgin women out for a good time before marriage...she gave her virginity up to a stranger..she should find a stranger or two to give their virginity up for the guy she will marry who will then divorce her ass after fucking it...maybe if she finds her hubby a virgin that may be who he will then marry but only after hes taken that virginity...either way id also exact revenge on her girlfriends again after ass fucking them also but take pics and post all over town

Now that she screwed over her Betroved to be. What will she say? Made him wait only to have her so called friends give her an orgy .if I was him I want good answers or no marriage.

have seen this kind of story before on Lit, BUT hey, so are many others here. I would just consider it as an intro. The potential is still good and follow-up chapters can go different ways. Good luck.

she isn't worth marrying, fuckem and leavem

Just looked at Y D bio. I feel real stupid now. Giving this encouragement to someone

who is not a first time writer,lol.

Unfortunately, this tells me too much about Y D talent & ability. I got a little wisdom from this. I still don't listen to the wife. She tells me to stop talking and think more,

before I get in deeper. She definitely is my better half! LoL

AMerryMan

I can see a women slipping after those loving friends set her up for a fall. ,to much alcohol and let herself go. Now how after making her husband to be wait for her virgin pussy is he going to accept, this but some kind of retribution or penance is do here. Or no marriage. I doubt she would let that happen to her again but she will note a virgin anymore. So how does that way on this couples future?

In storyville the situation and scenario can occur, however in the real world is such a situation possible ! ?

Virgin gets deflowered by 2 studs and molested by bi / lesbian friends a few days before her wedding. The virgin learns very quick hot perform BJ ans swallow, lick pussy and great at sex with a stud, all with out protest !

What kind of friends does she have if they want to ruin her life before she even gets to the alter to marry her man of her dreams !

She is now a total fucking slut, I hope her future husband finds out on kicks her to the street. She is now a cheater and will always be a cheater.

Yankee Dan--You are a sick fucker.

Actually some of us just have a decent set of moral values and find people who do this sort of thing deplorable. The bride and her friends are despicable and the worst sort of people! None of them care about anyone but themselves. The world would be a better place without people like this. The fucked up part is some people get off on this crap. Sad really.

Best friends, who really aren't friends. A virgin who has waited to get married before having sex suddenly gets laid on her bachelorette party and discovers she likes it. The standard "big cock"-fuck, I'm surprised she didn't do anal and ATM for good measure. And all this without even a shred of guilt.

I cheated on a girlfriend and I felt guilty and we weren't even in love, you'ld think the author would recognize that if she loved her boyfriend enough to marry him and respected herself enough to wait until marriage then she wouldn't have "just given in" so easily.

Maybe you could show the morning after where she confesses her actions and disowns her "friends" for encouraging her to cheat on her fiancée.

Not a shred of a loving wife anywhere in site!!! Just another whore story!!!

...for a story so badly written, it includes the misspelling 'apatite'.

Learn to write. This was shit.

May the fags who trashed it someday, somehow, get a life.

And hopefully one day you will you will grow up and magically sprout some balls you fucken douche, or if you are a bitch then fuck off with your std infested gash comments you fucken cunt.

to the comment by Deadone.the American soldier storming Omaha beach on 5 june 1943 would have been quite lonely,since the invasion actually took place on 6 june 1944!

She keeps her fiancé at bay yet gives it up at her bachelorette party. That is a secret she had better keep close to her chest. If I was her boyfriend, she would be gone if I ever found out.

How is someone supposed to have a conversation with you when you have identified yourself as annonymous? Just hidden amongst every other annonymous comment. This story is just complete gash, bitch should just come clean because she is now a whore. So she can go out and be her true whore self.

How come the people who think and really comment are the only ones to leave a trail and a name.

Re: Some of you are really fucked up

"Actually some of us just have a decent set of moral values and find people who do this sort of thing deplorable."

And you're on a cheating slut website why? Fucking troll. Take your decent morals and fuck them up your faggot ass.

@Anon We are here for Revenge stories with moral or not moral to enjoy BTB......

seems that way

She was set up by slutty 'friends' to be raped for their entertainment.

Mitch

This was rape. Her friends got her really drunk then brought in random guys. She was in no fit state to make any kind of decision. When she said no, her "friend" distracted her long enough for the guy to slip it in. Have fun in prison ladies, good thing you like eating pussy.

Yankee Dan a loser who thinks it's ok to rape a virgin! ASSHOLE!!!

Well done. Enjoyed the read. Only negative was her constant "good girl" utterances.

(When I felt Ricardo's dick pressing into me, I didn't make a conscious decision that said, "Fuck Tom." Or anything, I didn't think at all, I just opened my legs and squealed in pleasure and pain as Ricardo began to slide into me. Tonya's juices were flooding my mouth and I gulped them down, she was having an orgasm as she watched my cherry get popped. Ricardo's cock tore through my maidenhead and took my virginity.)

This is not the actions of a bitch getting raped . The cunt knew what she was doing by this time . She had more then enough time to stop if she wanted too . She chose not too . So you people that are screaming she was raped needs to pay attention a little better . The cunt wanted it and she got it . I really hope that this was video tape and the the boyfriend finds out before it is too late . But we all know that this will not happen . The boyfriend will turn out to be a wimp and a cuckold .

All you piss ant candy ass cock suckers (anonymous and others) who think the bitch deserves a pass because she was drunk you can go fuck yourselves. She was not drugged. Who told her to drink to the point she did? She was just a bitch who allowed her true self to emerge. No doubt her fiance missed the clues before the slut showed her true colors. He should have been more observant. It's easy to miss the signals when you love a slut.

hopefully her man will ditch her useless cheating cunt soon as he find out how she betrayed him

Typical story of an American...when they aren't being a fag and taking it in the rear admiral then they are getting off on being a cuckold.

they are all like that down there!

Waste of cyberspace.

'nuff said.

Can't take a story like this seriously. It's a fantasy. No bride does this stuff. Naughty is fun unless it's real.

This is stupid.

1*

Hope the sequel is your fiancé kicking you to the curb, but only after he and a few dozen of his friends have their way with you. As for your girlfriends, I've had a few like that and thank god I washed them out of my life years ago.

Go ahead write the sequel and please don't let Tom be some limp-dicked pussy.

Love, Bev

And OMG do the commenters realize that this is made up fun and not real?

I mean wow! People get really upset that you made up a character that didn't stay faithful to another character you made up.

I love the theme, so either a sequel or another one like it please :)

And I hope you find the other comments as entertaining as I do.

American cuck stuff. As a Nordic warrior I do enjoy gang banging a sweet innocent (dark-haired) or blonde mmm red even, wait a minute...brunettes? love 'em.. recently married slut-wife. But this was taking it too far! Have you NO shame?? Atrocious behavior! --------------4* by the skin

Does this story change in ANY substantive way if Hubby-To-Be Tom is written out altogether, and this tale is submitted to First Time or Reluctance or Lesbian? I don't think so! Oh, yeah...the party has to change to a birthday party, or some other 'girl get-together' ... but not a baby-shower!

Sweetie is NOT (yet) a wife, and her fiancé is of virtually no consequence that is developed or implied in the tale. NOT LW! Perhaps if another page had been written about her confessing, or about Tom figuring it out from Felipe's undies (which were kicked under her bed) where her deflowering had SOME consequence on her affianced! (Other than making his wedding night chores a little easier!)

Pig Whore

For those of you who made positive comments, thank you and I do want to write a sequel but I don't write them real quick so it will be a few weeks. In the next chapter I'll address the consequences and I have several routes I'm debating.

I wrote this story very quickly in response to a thread on the story ideas forum, because I wrote it so quickly I didn't proofread much, and I didn't expand on things to make the relationships more believable, that criticism is accurate.

To everybody who was offended, thank you! Your angry comments make writing these stories worthwhile. Although I should for decency's sake place a disclaimer at the start of my future LW stories about the cheating I suppose.

If this was just part 1, as the author's comment reveals, please name the story "Couldn't Quite Wait Part 1" or Chapter 1, etc. If that is not done, one must assume the story is complete as presented.

In part 2 have Tom find out the next morning then stop the wedding then go on that honeymoon trip to plan his revenge. By tricking Tonya and the others to take his virginity and fuck the shit out of them with his really big cock until they can't walk no more for two or three weeks. Then dvd it some he can show his ex whore bride.

Okay story, certainly stirred up a hornet's nest. My take is the so called friends set her up, jealousy? Bitches? Who knows why, maybe follow up will tell the tale.

As for it not being realistic, I know of a case nearby where a girl on her hens night was had her drink spiked by one of her bridesmaids so two guys could fuck her. All because the girls thought the "bride to be" was being too precious and difficult with the wedding preparations. There really are some sick fuckers out there as some of the comments on this story show.

very hot story! alpha latin studs conquer a good girl. happens all the time now, and going to keep happening more. love your description of raw sexuality. don't mind the guys who complain in comments, they're just mad at what they can't stop happening. women are going to go for the studs. deal with it.

hope in your sequel you will explore the way her fiance discovers he is a pussy compared to the real men

Only thing missing was a gang bang. lol I am very interested in finding out how she handles the next morning/day. How she is approached by her friends. What they tell her, say to her. She cannot regret what she did. She wanted it, needed it. Her Tom really built a fire in her to boil over. She has yet to know that she just got filled and stretched. by a real man cock. On her wedding night she will find this out. When Tom, as over heated as he is, fucks his wife for the first time. His much shorter and thinner cock will slide right in and be blowing his build up in a matter of 45 seconds or so. This will so disappoint our little virgin, but Tom will get better and better so he can last up to 5 min at a time. Then no matter how she trys, she will begin to compare. Her first stud lover to her husband Tom. And her friends will only add more fuel to her fire. How will our little Miss handle reality? I await chapter 2.

and plotted. But a very horrible idea.

Hopefully this marriage will never happen, this story and so called writer blow dicks.

Women written as a Life support system for her cunt with no other redeeming qualities whatsoever Great writing and a weak women character

fucked up tbh... it would be a different story if her fiance was a bad guy or if she wasn't a virgin or any other factors buthow can you make the love of your life wait but not a random stranger? it's your virginity!!! I hate other women -.-

what a bunch of sick cunts

1* fIANCE needs to drop her like a lead balloon

..............so many comments by so many reader observers seem to view this as a story ! C'mon folks this barely qualifies as an introduction to or a prelude for what might have been a FANTASTIC story based upon this incredible foundation, but apparently Yankee Dan couldn't quite invest the time and effort to finish "Couldn't Quite Wait." C'mon...........what a cop out.

Well there's not going to be a wedding now and the cum dump slut is on the way to ply the age old whore trade. She should be able to charge at least a ten spot for all holes.

As another commenter observed, it's a good start. But It's all about what happens next.

The so called friend is clearly out to destroy her marriage. Will the newly inaugerated slut develop a conscience and more importantly what will her fiancè do WHEN he finds out?

Could be good, could be great or stink like week old fish. Can't yet say other than it's well written. A great potential opener.

What a major cop out Yankee Dan this website made a stupid mistake by put you as one of top authors your stories are all about the LGBT BS. You made a promise five years ago that the second chapter will be the consequences the bride to be and her bridesmaids and what kind of vengeance Tom will do. Finish the story or let someone better to finish it.

My fiancée is still a virgin, and it’s my greatest fantasy for her to let another man take her virginity. I hope there’s someone like Ricardo out there, ready and willing to deflower her.

I love reading this over and over!

I’m a cuckold with a virgin fiancée, and it’s my greatest fantasy for her to let a stud take her virginity! Whenever I read your story, I pretend that it’s my fiancée. It makes me cum so damn hard!

I can’t explain it. The best I can do is tell you to imagine the hotness of another man taking the anal virginity of a married woman, but multiply that by a million! It involves virgin pussy. I can’t stop thinking about a big dick entering her pussy for the first time! Her virgin cunt would squeeze it so tight! No matter what I do, another man would own my fiancée’s virginity. The extreme jealousy and humiliation of my permanent situation would arouse me like nothing else.

Please write more about things like this!

NOT EVEN ONE STAR. SUCKED, A WASTE OF TIME!

This was not a.popular story, and for very good reason.

Her fiance is expecting a virgin bride that doesn't know about sex. That sure is not possible anymore. She had unprotected sex...She could have an STD, or have gotten pregnant. She may get married to Tom, but it won't last.

YD

Your story was simply another iteration of the Virgin fiancee getting fuck at the bachelorette party trope. Unfortunately for you, some of the similar tales are superior. The ending fizzled...I presume because you didn't know where it should lead. You focused on the loss of virginity...and totally dismissed any potential repercussions her behaviour might have if the poor dumb schmuck of a groom notices on the wedding night, mmmm. ..methinks someone has beaten me to it! I mean come on...you had the would-be bride telling her fiance no go on the premarital sex. Then you spend the majority of the story demonstrating clearly that this stupid bitch believes she is not under the same restriction that she imposed on the groom to be. The result?... a shallow bimbo of a character who does not garner any sympathy from readers.

Try finishing the damn story… this is very lazy storytelling. You get 1 star until you finish it up.

Hate these stories that are not finished. Future husband should run fast away from this slut. 1 star

Shit!

I really wish this had more chapters.

Did she get pregnant? If so, maybe she won’t tell Tom it’s not his?

Will she still get married? Will Tom be sexually unsatisfying making her continue to cheat?

Will Tonya continue to be a part of that?

I’d love to read more

Fucking dumb whore story.

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Virgin finance?

Capitals for TOM?

Couldn't read it.

Beautifully written, with such a deep desire to be original

Oh, wait....what the fuck was I thinking!! This was a by the numbers, usual cuck crap story that has no worth beyond the literary case of herpes it gave all of us.

Nice friends you have there, Susie. I'm sure Tonya will be there in a few years to advise you on how you can better manage your life right into a divorce. - if you get that far.

Yeah no instant cancelation of wedding, as the Groom I'd make everyone of those whores pay for the rest of their lives.