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Anonymousalmost 14 years agoWow, what a really long first paragraph!
Depending on how you split it, there were three to four paragraphs all running on together. Makes it hard to read, and is it saving any paper?
AzPilotalmost 14 years agoIt also needed some editing.
i liked the story so far, but the lack of editing slowed the reading down some. Things such as "than" for "then" several times as well as needing some attention to punctuation while not really major, do stand out badly.
Anonymousabout 5 years agoWay too many loose ends for my taste. Maybe another chapter could tie up a few of those, but seems like that third chapter is long overdue. Oh well, I won’t hold my breath.
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