by DMBs_stardust
Why didn't you wait until you had more of a story to give us? It's a so-so start but I expected more than this. I kept reading hoping it would get better but then there wasn't anything else to read; kind of like taking a drink of Coke that has all the fizz gone, it was just flat and disapointing.
Brynn is somewhat sympathetic. I want to like her, though I don't like her actions so far. I like her brother, at least, what I know of him.
I look forward to seeing where you take the story.
I hope you don't make us wait too long! Love the build up so far.
Promising Beginning - but where's the rest??