All Comments on 'Crowded Bar'

Starts off better than it finishes.

The beginning was a little rough with the point of view but got a lot better. The ending wasn't satisfying though, simply because of the language, especially calling her a slut.

Have always wanted to do something like that, newer had the girlfriend to..

the only bad thing about your story is that it finished early, keep on writing, want to se an sequel to it..

enjoyed it much!