All Comments on 'Crushing on my Sister’s Boyfriend'

great start

this made me cum, but I hate myself that it made me cum

Solid first effort. Didn't care for the way James treated her, he was a total dick, but since it ticked me off it means you had me invested in the mains character. But your style is smooth and easy, and it was a great take on the feelings of a sibling who isn't the favorite, very natural and believable set up.

Keep writing.