All Comments on 'Crystal the Cleaner Ch. 01'

This was very hot and a great start. Grammar aside I think you have a real talent for writing hot scenes including what makes each character get off *lewd comments etc*. Maybe apply more background to the story and conflict *i see some between the father and son* All and All very solid start and certainly got this lady a lil hot under the cuff 4*!. Keep going

Don't break up paragraphs into sentences. Use a spell checker, but don't rely on it. Listen to anons, they may be rude, but they're providing the feedback you requested. They're not clowning your content, just the mechanics and that is a compliment in and of itself IMHO. I agree that you do show a talent for hotness, so don't get discouraged.