All Comments on 'Cure Worse Than The Disease? Ch. 01-02'

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Anonymousalmost 4 years ago

My 2 cents

A good start. What a fucked up family, but there are possibilities. Please continue. Thanks for your time and imagination.

Anonymousalmost 4 years ago

Poor dialogue

The concept is nice, but the dialogue is overly formal, wooden, and very choppy. It reads like you're trying to bash the reader over the head with it.

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This is me, Sev. Aka SEVERUSMAX. I can't get back into my main account for some odd reason, though I can on the forum. I created this account so as to continue posting my stories on that side. Thanks for your continued reading of my smut. I don't mind constructive criticism, b...

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