by lizperson
Looks like this is shaping up to be a exciting read... can't wait for the next chapter
Like the way this story has begun. it will be interesting to see where things go with Tristan. does he expose himself to her or Does he get her revenge for her and Make her Boyfriend and ex-Best Friend his underlings feeding off scraps he allows them.
Don't let the low scores make you nervous. This is a quality story, and I really think you have a strong opening. Don't give up on this, it's really really good.
Your writing is crisp and clear with a storyline not overly done or too farfetched.