by Loose_by_name
WHAT THE FUCK IS WRONG WITH YOU?
Watersports I can handle, cutting off her flaps and kissing the blood.....you belong in a white jacket and padded room! Sicko.
Great story!! I believed you must live this, and I want very much to be your Daddy!!
I hope this is not only a fantasy... I enjoyed reading it a lot and even though I'm a grammar freak, I didn't notice the errors until I read the other comments because I was identifying with the story so much. I'm proud of being a sick puppy and if other people don't like it, then don't read the story! Watersports are great and Australians are great at it, we've proven it in the Olympics :-P
some what sick some what good not sure that is why I only marked it as 50
Hang in there, girl. People like you and I are not everyone's cuppa, but we can have fun without them. I've always wondered about the people who say a story is useless because the grammar is not perfect--form is everything and function is nothing. I did not think it was possible to be that shallow, I stand corrected. Your stories don't sparkle, so what? Being entertained is fun but what I like more is the glimpses I get into an authors mind.
and just remember that speaking the truth is far more courageous than insulting someone, afterall they had to read your work to insult it, says more about them .
Very emotional - very real. Your writing illustrates a world that few people will understand, let alone inhabit. If the unworthy are barred entry by a perceived lack of gramma and structure, so be it; I will not miss them.
K
...get it right or say nothing. Your point is valid, but commas are THINGS, not A THING.
The premise is not bad, but the writing and imagination is lacking structure. IT could be a bit more vivid and imaginitive.