All Comments on 'Daddy's Desperate Girl'

Good start. Relax, slow down and let things develop. Looking forward to see where you take this. Good girl! LOL

Calling her Dads friend daddy does not incest make. Dialogue is akin to a low budget porno. This is also very short. I would shy away from huge tits massive cocks and gurls squirting so easily. Keep trying

"Andy was an acquaintance of Misty's father... " She never even thinks about her father. First Time, Romantic Encounters, maybe Non-Cons, but definitely not incest. Beyond that, it moved really really fast. From shy and socially awkward straight to Daddy fantasy sex in almost no time... More buildup would make your story flow better. But that's just my opinion. Good effort, though. And thank you thank you thank you for not giving the guy some gigantic 12" cock.

I appreciate the feedback. I am aware I moved it kind of fast and that incest is not really the right category. This was meant to be a ddlg story but I did not see that as an option when publishing. I based her figure somewhat on my own when I was that age, thus the large breasts. I will keep all feedback in mind though when writing, thank you.

This is clearly not incest

Obvious role playing but still hot. Can't wait until he fills his slutty little girls cunt full of daddy's cock

too bad for the first time story, way too fast and too short, tit size based on your own tits? a picture is worth a 1000 words

Not well thought out. The dialogue of the characters did not suit the narrative you declared.

Wrong category, internet porn clip speed, reluctant to compliant in about three words? Phooey!

This is really my type of fantasy and I know how you feel as far as ddlg doesn’t really have a “home” category on this site. I don’t know what the solution is but I’ll look out for more stories from you in any category. I agree with other comments that the story is fast but personally as a woman who likes ddlg play this was hot and could just continue with more build up scenes...I really wanted to comment because I loved that she has hips and DDDs because that’s my body type too—not fat but seriously top heavy and curvy hips. I liked that she wasn’t necessarily flat and tiny bodied etc. some of us little girls are womanly lol

Dear MaskedPrincess,

Thank you so much for your story. I loved it. No matter the category this is brilliantly written and hot as. I felt some of it may have been autobiographical but that maybe wishful thinking. I gave 5 stars and added you to my list as a fave author. I look forward to reading much more of your work.

I found it weak.

Correct category though.

2 stars.kwUYmk

Please continue this story. Touching myself as I read it.