All Comments on 'Daddy's Gonna Do Things!'

I couldn't get beyond the first two pages.

WTF?

"Shortly before her nineteenth birthday Haley Snow suddenly began developing."

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Really? She started developing at 19? This reads like a story where originally she was much younger, you found out about the age limitations on this site, and just changed it without any other edits.

Really enjoyed most of that, but ooccasionally some of the vocabulary is reminiscent of primary school; boobies, sausage, dingle, etc. are very childish terms and quite jarring as a result.

All of the pregger talk and then her plotting ruined a good story for me. I still gave you a 3.

Thanks for sharing your work!

some pedo fantasy that had to be edited, badly, to make it 'legal' for posting here. The only thing you got right, was letting her have some pubic hair. Other than that, just absolute dogshit