All Comments on 'Dad's Sad Dilemma Ch. 02'

But the dad thing is starting to get in the way. For me the dad being there all the time and helping and being involved is a turn off, it should be one on one. Send him to bed or away for a few days and get it on.

Great but would love for it to get a little more interesting with domination to both the mother and the Father. Some cuckold humiliation would be nice if you can show that the father is actually enjoying this and not just doing it for his wife. Also I don't know if that's asking too much but i love feet so if we can get some foot action that would be really great. Overall great though, LOVE IT.

this story is just not up to par in any way to your previous series..it's... boring...totally lacks the sex charged action that your previous series did..and definetly needs to be ramped up..! ! 2 chapters that could have been said in 2 paragraphs... the ken & jon characters need to be much more studly/macho...with ken not only being turned on to watching jon..but to the point where his dormant bi side comes into play..with him getting jon "ready" and feasting on his son's cremepies..etc..with mom craving watching dad and son together..but with total macho action...yes...as a woman/mom..i and other readers like me.. know and find that scenerio is a bigggggg turn-on...

I like the basic story, and it's becoming sexier. No problems there. It's a little silly in how unrealistic it is, with the son suddenly fingering his own mother and the mother just letting it pass without some serious discussion, but that's okay. Most incest stories here at Lit are equally implausible.<p>

The biggest problem with this story is the way you constantly change from 1st person to 3rd person. You just can't do that, especially not in the middle of the same paragraph. You can't constantly ping-pong back and forth between "I said," to "he said," with mom toggling between the son's 1st person perspective and her own 3rd person thoughts and actions. There are instances where you can switch back and forth, but it can't be within the same scene, the same conversation and even the same paragraph.<p>

You need to sort that out before you submit your next chapter. Since you're so keen to reveal all three characters' thoughts to the reader I'd highly suggest you just write the rest of the story in 3rd person. If you're going to stick to having the son narrate the story in 1st person then you have to let go of the constant 3rd person narratives of mom and dad. Their actions have to be described through the eyes of the son, and their thoughts have to be gleaned through what he sees and hears from them.<p>

You'd probably be better off going with 3rd person.

You wrote another super Chapter about Dad's Dilemma moving along quite nicely so far. I like how you had mom being teased by her son. I can hardly wait for the next chapter when she finally gives in to him I hope.

wonderful buildup with this, i can't wait to read the next chapter,

still readin'! Still lovin' it!!!!

I'm really loving the story but some of the grammar and a lot of the punctuation make it hard to keep things straight. If you had someone to edit it, it would be much better.

Lovely Tale!

5 Stars

So far this series has not disappointed. Especially enjoy the characters' emotional development. Plot development is logical and consistent.