All Comments on 'Damon & Dawn Ch. 01'

sorely in need of an editor

They live in a six story wear house. Hmmmmm. Didn't waste another minuet of my time reading more...

Really good story. You just need to learn about how to spell the possessive "their."

...didnt read it when I saw all the spelling mistakes...If I were your master I would give you ten lashes for each.

There = over there, there it is

Their = belonging to them

Pail = bucket

Pale = light coloured

Really if you are going to write one of the first rules is to go through your finished story with a fine toothed comb and correcting any grammar or spelling mistakes. Or get someone else to do it for you. Apart from that it was great. Good effort.