All Comments on 'Dana Comes Home'

i couldn't finish this story it got to boring half way down page one nothing to keep the readers intrest especially when you switched to brendan's point of view it would have been better if you had kept it in one point of view then write a second story from the other

story needed entire family involved..mom and dad sharing... together... brendon/dana..and really hottttt element... first time ...total..family "bi"..and for women/moms like myself and anna..watching and participating in dad/son hot stud bi...nothing hotter than that scenerio...

I thought it was a good story. The sex was hot. The story was well-written. This story is much better than most of the garbage that gets posted here. Thanks for sharing !

I thought this was strong. Forget about the negative comments; they are wrong and unhelpful. I like a complete story. I don't need another one from another point of view. I'm glad you tried to describe both's emotions and sensations. I'm also glad you took the time to build up the seduction. It's pretty obvious that there's more story suggested and I thought you planted the seed well without giving it away. Keep writing! Yeah, sure there was some awkwardness here and there, but we're all practicing. Aren't we?

A well executed example of a standard story. Brother, sister, university age, massage and alcohol/drugs, seduction, sex. Well written, what's the problem?

Why would people find reasons to be negative about such a good story? Hell, I loved it! Thanks for your story. You can write one for me anytime you have the inclination.

What now is keep going with this storyline. Very good, very good indeedy.

There's nothing quite like the help from a sibling to ease your tensions .They found excitement and release through one another and you described it beautifully . Thanks and please continue with this duo . There's no need to add family members when they can have so much fun on their own .

Loved it. What's next. Man I can't wait for more.

With Dana being freshly fucked and smelling like a street whore, Mom couldn't not know that she had been fucking her brother. Thus comes the dilemma of what to do.......A well written story and a good storyline. I am interested to read what will happen now. Thanks

Well written and a very enjoyable read. Thank you.

DANA SOUNDS HOT , AND PASSING MOM IN THE HALL MAY HAVE LIT AFIRE UNDER MOM. WATCH OUT BRENDAN, HERE COMES MOM....IT'S A GOOD READ, PLEASE KEEP IT UP..............LAROC OF AGES

seems there are a lot of underage virgins reading here thats the only way to explain all the rave reviews on a subpar story.

Great story. Dana sounds like a woman who you can forever emjoy.

I Liked it, it was fast paced for sure.

Landing pad? A 'landing pad' is where a drone or helicopter lands.

"Landing Strip" maybe?

Great story. Set up the story without being overly lengthy. Brother/sister sex description was descriptive and erotic. Got me off!!! Look forward to Ch 2 and your other written endeavors