All Comments on 'Danger Ch. 1'

you caught my attention in the begining

BUUT when the sex got started it seem completely unrealistic...sorry bud

Although it is well-written, the first chapter in this story is much too rushed. There is no proper introduction to the main character, or for that matter, the other characters. There is no real build-up in the plot. The love scene is well-written, but too rushed and too short.