All Comments on 'Daniel and His Mother Ch. 03'

Ok three chapters, and nothing but a kid being mistreated. This is sick and not understanding where your going? Mom being a Donmecor son snaps? Taking revenge on her, church, etc?

This is not erotic incest this is just a pile of crap about an abusive violent controlling mother

poorly written this time no erotic scenes either

I like very much the idea that mother starve his son in favour of herself to become fitter and sexier. However at this point I think it's time for Daniel to begin to have sexual thoughts about his mother's huge breast and sexy muscular butt. I would love to read that as mother become more and more beatiful and fit , thanks to her daily trainings, Daniel, on the other side, despite all the unfair punishment that he receive, won't be able to stop himself from looking to his mother's massive tits and fantasize about her and get erections during her daily massages. these odd and involuntary feelings could make him more and more fascinated by her sexy body and consequently more submissive and obedient towards her and more and more willingly to please her. He could become psicologically insane because of her . She could oblige him to say that he love her and make him kiss her on the cheek every time they meet with her being topless.Of course he won't be able to not ogle at her sexy breast every time and get more and more punishment and scolds because of it. Since he can't stop from looking at her sexy body, She could accuse him of jerking off thinking about her huge breast and sexy butt and for example she could take away from him his room and make him sleep on the floor, in her bedroom to prevent his masturbation habits since it's clear that he can't control himself towards her. at one point she could even let him jerk off looking at her topless body if he's such a pervert that he can't control himself, letting him know that if he does he will get the resulting punishments but he would be so aroused by her that he would jerk off in front of her anyway. I'd like mother to be more obnoxious bragging about her increasing beauty and fit body, disgusted that men can't take their eyes from her perfect body

A beautiful and realistic age for a mother to notice her son

Mom needs a taste of her own discipline. Daniel needs to cane her and let her know the abuse is over

It is time to bring a more erotic element into the story.

Author, consider very carefully where

your going with this tail. You are at a crossroads.

The mother can either have a coming

to Jesus moment about the abuse she's

inflicting. resulting in maybe her child not

running away on her.

Or you leave only one possible out come.

He screws up enough to get 30 points one day.

And she murders him in cold blood...

Either way there's no happy ending/hope to

this story and I'm done reading any further.

I don't see you salvaging this in any redeeming way

You should have erotic moments with his mom and less punishment or turn the punishment on the mother for her past sin it would be fair and can get erotic fast because noting happen so far.

There is a line with dominance and submission. You cross that line even with forced or coerced sadism and masochism and you then break the law. There is nothing sexy, alluring or desirable there. You have crossed the line several times and now picked up said line and jump roped with it. Even a perverse tale has an appeal. This one, not so much if at all. As a writer of erotica, you should be trying to illicit feelings of sexual arousal not anger and malice. Personally, I would have beat the bitch within an inch of her miserable life after kicking her teeth down her throat.

This isn't incest, it's uncontrolled BDSM. This is more criminal then incest. Learn about what your writing before you do it.

I given this story 3 tries and I still don’t like it. The mental and psychotic behavior of the mom is.awful. She’s trying to brainwash him... I skipped most of this chapter. She deserves a taste of her own medicine. The violence of beating her adult son is not a turn on.

Honestly now the story has reached a point that it is just bogged down under itself. We get it. It is just more of the same, ramped up a bit more each time. But again, we get it. Point taken. 12 pages in now and simply nothing has occurred that hasn't already occurred. 12 pages! 12 pages and we still have the same things. The mother is a bitch and the son is unrelatable and dull. You could have easily established all this in much less time. When does the story part actually start? You haven't established a plot yet.

Now that aside, let's look at what you have. You don't have an erotic story. You don't have a bdsm story. You have an abusive mother. (And that does not require 12 pages to establish) At this point the only things that can reasonably occur would be:

1. The son runs away

2. The son kills his mother

3. The mother gets found out and is arrested

4. The mother kills the son

5. The son eventually grows up and moves out

But at the pace you are going, none of these outcomes would be interesting or worth slogging through the story for. Break lines, cross boundaries, push the borders, whatever, that is fine, but make it something interesting. I honestly can not stress it enough that all you have done is write a tedious uninteresting 12 pages that has gone nowhere. It isn't even a build up at this point. Any tension previously established is long gone.

You really are one sick puppy. Incest be dammed this is pure bdsm

I like extreme Femdom and this story has it. I get tired of happy endings as Femdom should not end as a friggin Disney movie. Only criticism I have of this story so far is the lack of description of the mother in what she is wearing and the mother should sexually torment him more...otherwise keep writing this story.

Obviously this is extreme. I don't understand why other people don't understand that. It's very well written and I'm looking forward to more, because I also enjoy weird shit. Personally I'd like to see him start to experience stockholm syndrome

Not too bad, keep it up!

What a moronic story. There is nothing remotely erotic about it on any level, just pathetic abusiveness.

Please keep going

can hardly wait to see how things escalate in the next chapter .the way things are progressing i suspect the mother will add taking care of her urges to masturbate soon so she will feel like the burden of sin is being transferred

That was way too dark and it’s barely even sexual now man you need to change the story arch

Have mom find a reason for justification that a new way he has to help her is sexually pleasing her and reasons why it's ok. And have Daniel hate it at first until he can't control enjoying being deep inside him mom with a big ass and cumming in her tight holes

Sure some people say its "moronic" but I guess they dont understand the humiliation and punishment fetish in an agressive non-con environment correctly. I'm not into punishment but I can definetly relate to it since I enjoy humiliation in a mom son story. It's actually also pretty bravely written when you think of literoticas standards when it comes to incest stories. I also like the pace of progression in the story and in the mind of the son. He keeps being reluctant and it is so fucking hot. Much better than him just getting a boner while massaging her and saying "Guess I want to fuck my mom now."

Sure even for me it's almost crossing the border to Fuck-This-Shit Land, especialy since she is really torturing him and I really don't like spankings or blood related stuff. However, I want to see what happens when they fuck and what the son will think of his new life. That makes me keep reading. The only problem I have is that there should be a stronger barrier when it comes to talking with teachers and the police. He could theoreticaly start confiding in a teacher, record the moments of abuse and then go on from there. Just to make it the story round and also a little darker.

There is a lot of build up but they never cross the line. It's pretty hot, but unless there is release there is little point to it. She should just give in and decide to hell with it and do as she pleases with him. Hurt him untill she get's so turned on she decides to just take him!

This is one of the best series I've ever read! I can hardly wait for the fourth installment!

Good story !! I can't wait they start fucking and why not introduce more women more incest (no other kids or man) just women's (aunt , mom friend , .....)

I think you might have taken this a stretch too far. I love the idea of the mother in control but there’s no need for her to go so far. She can just prevent him from seeing any girlfriends, keep him to herself, give him all the sexual gratification he needs etc etc. etc and keep him at home. Bot the violence and the blood is not necessary. She need to keep him healthy and willing.

looking forward to the next chapter. ignore the haters. my story submission elicited the same response. it is similar to yours -i think you would like it ;)

Seriously, you have talent. I've been refreshing your profile for weeks. Can't wait for the next update.

Please can you tell us in the comments when are you going to release the next chapter!! This will help a lot !!

We need more lol

Dude could you at least give us an update. I get it if you’re busy but you could at least tell us.

Don’t leave me hanging here finish it

Continue the next chapter!!! Tell us where you are in the comments!!!

next chapter ??

Still waiting for next chapters !!!!

If I was ever in that situation I would either: kill the mother, get the fuck out of there or commit suicide so the mother can do her abusive nature on someone else.

Please continue.

This is disturbing at this point. I read and actually kinda liked the first chapter but that was in expectation of some kind of payoff. I can see now you are only interested in describing physical abuse and horror. At this point I would suggest changing to the erotic horror tab as this has no place here or even in the BDSM tab

The increasingly sadistic nature of the mother is a good progression, but I'd like to see a little bit more overall story progression at this point. It just feels like a series of pornos strung together at this point

Your story is like to keep a diary! Even its a fantasy its completely unbelievable! When a story doesnt be recognisable at reality its only laughable!!

I was taught that Jesus received 39 lashes before the crucifixion because any more was considered a death sentence. Seems a shame that the ridiculous mother in this particularly shallow piece of work doesn't appear to know that. Maybe it would be more meaningful if the religious elements were more to the fore, or maybe if there was anything other than outright cruelty driving her actions?

This story isn't a satisfying read if it doesn't end with Daniel strapping his mom to a chair, waterboard jer with gasoline, lash her and pour lemon in her wounds, then light her ablaze. Only then would this deserve anymore than 0 rating

wrong category! take it out of incest/taboo and put it into BDSM and psycopathic authors section.

The story started out well in the first chapters, but now it's the same ol song and dance. Boy fucks up, mom wants butt rub, then boy punished by a freak..repeat,repeat,repeat.. story is BDSM, not erotic/taboo

Yeah, story ends when son kills and cooks mother and feds her to the pastor. Before he leaves to canada.

Lame I felt as frustrated as the kid in the story.