by ropebound
Good fantasy overall. But I think he could've been a little bit rougher with her. I think she would've liked that too.
Just because she's eighteen doesn't mean she wasn't still living with her parents and that they kicked her out when she refused to stop seeing the guy.
Mayb he wants to ask for permission? Like an old time thing? Defiantly missing something there but not a bad first try.
Did I miss something? She's over 18 and her parents kicked her out. They don't have a say in when or who she marries.