All Comments on 'Danny's'

You need to buy a bag of commas and find the right places to put them. Try reading your stories aloud to see where you're pausing.

wmjm54 was certainly correct when they advised you punctuate your work more carefully. You have a rare talent for using words. Your story reads like the transcription of a master storyteller's spoken recitation of a tale. That is a rare quality in a writer's work and is greatly to be admired. Thank you for sharing. 5 stars.