All Comments on 'Dare Game'

I rather liked the ending, the twist was ironic an creative.

'nuff said.

Really appreciated the delightfully articulated set up and denouement. Hope this isn't just a one-off and that you will continue writing, even if it is about other characters. Please keep it going. Thanks!

I really liked the Story. Please keep up writing.

The very end was a little too stretched for my liking (what are the chances?), but I very much enjoyed your writing style, as well as the story-line. By not going over the top with the erotica, you kept the story plausible. I hope you write some more.

For your first submission to the site, you did fantastic. It's not perfect, but it is well written, most of the story had a really nice flow, and it could be "inspired by a true story". Keep up the good work!

very long and mostly boring would have been better in the novelas area very little incest would have been better if it had been revealedit was the brother and sister cyber sexing instead of her friends brother

You wove a nice tale and held our interest until the very end. Now you have to follow up with a Chapter 2 so we know more. Great job!

I didnt get through the first page. Reading this was like listening to a 16 year old girl ramble on about everything going through her head.

Grade a material. Kinda has a slow buildup, but had my attention thru the whole. Ch. 2 please.....

Very good, and I think someone said this was a first submission.

Congrats, stuff this good does well.

Love another chapter.

I agree with one of the other comments that this was a bit long, but I do think it was worth it. What a creative idea.

Definitely keep writing. I look forward to seeing more of your work.

Thanks. I found it a great read. Good concept and well written.

Really like how well written your story is. Please cont the writting.

I was really impressed for lots of reasons. I liked the twist, because of course I thought it was the brother. I like that this was brother-sister incest. Not enough good stories. I just love the "genre" for all the taboo, seduction, strange intimacy. Now of course you have a sequel without it being part II. Loved that you got some other little sexy stuff in it. Great work paperfly.

This is my first attempt at writing anything other than a school / university essay so I am very grateful for all the positive comments.

I am also very interested to read any criticisms so that hopefully I can then try to improve.

I really liked the buildup. Much like the best of the 'real' thing. Please, do continue!

I haven't ever read a story on this site that had such a great twist that I didn't even see coming! Even without the twist, AWESOME story. Keep it up!

It was good. I liked the twist...

I have read tons of stories and yours was perfect. Quite predictably that the guy she was talking to was Kim's brother but I'm just good at guessing. I wish there were more chapters because this definetely had me turned on and squirming in my seat.

The twist was predictable, mainly because it was necessary. I liked the train chat up false herring - made me wonder briefly if he was going to be fuxhunter.

Keep writing, maybe a sequel.

Suggestion: A bit more detailed description of the sex.

you must i say must continue and ASAP

Very well written story. One of the best I've seen in a long while. Hope you do a chapter 2 with the same amount of build up.

I absolutely loved it and omg I need more NOW

I knew midway threw that her "cyber friend" was Kim's brother, so no twist for me. I also kinda found the story long and drawn out with too little "incest/taboo, to be honest.

Okay. Wow. Didnt see that coming. I agree with the second anon. I would love to see more of this.

Well written...however...way to predictive sorry...still very well done

I thought this was a very well done story. Ending wasn't the best but overall the story was very good.

Dope

I need to find some british stories. All the british writers write sexy stories.

Good story, great ending!

Nice twist. I was kind of expecting fuxhunter to be Andy. Nicely protracted to build the tension. You’ve taught me something. Thanks

Very nice story plot... very exciting with good pace

Damn that's a good story, to bad it's 11 years later, that should have had a continuation....