All Comments on 'Dare to Desire Ch. 01'

Besides the fact you’ve apparently stolen bits and pieces from other stories, THIS IS HORRIBLY WRITTEN!! I couldn’t make it past the first few sentences. Please do us a favor and STOP WRITING! At least until you’ve learned English properly and taken (and passed) a creative writing course!

That's all?

Dont quit your day job. That was boring as fuck

Liked the premise. Big fan of Genie stories always a good read. But, what’s with the single page entry that kinda can be left to the imagination what he wishes for. Also kinda is and isn’t incest he just stroked his dick to thoughts of his sister no actual sex. I appreciate the read still liked it just left with more questions than answers. I understand it’s your first story but it was a little haphazard. I hope to read more from you and see a bit more setting and characters added into it.

Ok, it would be a good idea to find an editor, but the first three commenters came across much too harsh. The basic story, while using familiar themes, has promise. Literotica.com offers help for new authors, and I’d suggest you look into what’s available.

Dare to write your desires!

Hey folks, thank you for the wonderful criticism. Mwah I love you kings and queens

Some of these other comments are so mean. Would like to see more from you, keep going!

lame...

Ok time to ass fuck anybody who enters the house LOL

Good start

Pretty fucking sad that after 8 months you still havnt released anything further