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mBrowmBrowover 14 years ago
Intriguing start

This work offers conceptual promise, but the delivered text is quite awkward and therefore distracting, due to words misused, missing, misspelled. Sometimes the wrong word was used. The story was challenging for me to navigate, though I would like to see more, with better language execution. A patient editor could do wonders for this story. Good luck!

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