All Comments on 'Darkness Desires Ch. 01'

Needs more but good start. Potential.

I think you have a great story. Love the little details that tell us about the main gal. Also love the spin on "And Everything Went Black", so cliche!

Great job! Just make the next chapter a little longer or else youll lose potential fans (*wink wink*)

Something's missing ... Oh, the rest of the story! It's an engaging story, nice start, nice flow, spelling and vocabulary. Run-on sentences could use some attention, though. Thanks for this start!

Thanks for the comments so far. Ch. 2 is much longer I just haven't posted it yet. I wanted to see how well this first little section went over. I will type up the next chapter sometime within the week. Thanks for the support so far. This is my first published story.

Im ready to read the rest, dont make us wait to long. PLEASE! !!!

Nice build up, solid if surprising cliffhanger. Hope for more to follow.

I found myself so caught up in the story that when it abruptly ended I actually blinked. For a moment I just sat here with a very "wtf" feeling. I'm ecstatic to see the next chapter.