by ShadowThought
/me i loved the story the fantasy we all have sometimes :) so wel written thanks
Very good story. The only distracting flaw I noticed was the name change, When John became Jack for a few paragraphs or so. 5*
Great story. The hot tub scene in chapter 1 was a little bit too accelerated. Also, you missed an opportunity to have Carol DP in this chapter. . .