All Comments on 'Dave and Alicia Ch. 04'

I love your stories! I am sad that this one is finished, but thrilled to pieces with the ending.

Happy New Year! And keep on writing!

the story was great. I felt so sad when dave broke down crying because of what stephanie did. But I'm totally estatic that alicia can give dave a baby. I didn't want the story to end but I'm glad that it ended this way. Can't wait for you to write another story.

My guilty pleasure - brother/sister incest stories. You are one of the best at writing them, just the way I like them. I hope you'll continue with further stories along the same lines.

Love the brother/sister love stories and yours is one of the best. Keep them coming!

I have loved reading everyone of the installments to this story. I am looking forward to your continuing work. Please allow me to say thank you very much for your hard work.

Oh man, was that an interesting chapter. I teared up a bit when David told Alicia that Stephanie had the abortion. Oi...and I'm so glad that their parents took it alright. And what a lovely ending! Another amazing close to another amazing story!

What more can I say that has not been said before!.

Outstanding story!.

Tears, life and death, all the things that make life all

that more real in a story.

GOOD SHOW!!..dan

Touching and sweet. I loved the way you depicted the love felt by this family for each other, and for Brett, Elizabeth, and Samantha too. And I loved the way Alicia consistently refers to her brother as David, not Dave--her special name for her special guy. As for Stephanie--an unlikable character who reacted true to form. As sad as her abortion was for Dave, it saved him from a lifetime of connection to her.

Please write more stories. You are a bright light of hope and talent among the thousands of stories here.

This was such a powerful chapter. The bitterness I felt for Stephanie's actions were completely erased by the sweet ending. I still think about it a lot.

Both of the stories in this series, Brett and Elizabeth, and Dave and Alicia, were outstanding dramatic pieces, not just for Literotica, but for anywhere.

I can't wait to read anything else you write, Chargergirl. And I know I'm not alone.

WOW! I love your stories chargergirl. they are so well written and have such a great background, you always seem to but a but of mystery in to your stories that makes me want to continue reading. I hope you continue to write because I will anxiously be waiting.

great story. the ending was great.

...i wish there was more. but at the same time, i'm glad that it ended this way. i really liked the way their parents took their relationship in stride. and yay for alicia and david having a baby. you can just tell it's what they really wanted. another wonderful story.

This is such a beautiful story - and the way that Dave totally broke down when he discovered that Stephanie had gone for an abortion shows an unusual sensitivity in a lot of males, particularly those who are characters in stories on Literotica! Please write more... and make Alicia's pregnancy one of twins, too - that would really cheer Dave up! Let's maybe even have a Sammie & one of Dave and Alicia's kids, plus the other two D&A offspring getting together as an incestuous couple...

This is the second time I've read your stories. They are among the best I have ever read. I love everything about them, and the characters are so realistic. You certainly have a gift. Please keep sharing it with us.

I've been reading stories on this site for a few years now. And I always vote, however, I have only yet left one comment. This will be the second ever. This story (Complete story) was one of the best, BEST, I have ever read here. It touched my heart in so many ways and was able to draw out so much emotion. I hope you continue to write more stories because you do truly have a great talent that should NOT go to waste! Cheers

Wow...

I'm a man but something really with the word "Abortion" really hit me that much.

At least it had ended in a very positive side...

KEEP ON WORKING!

I enjoyed so much, I hated to see them end. This was just such a story! Thanks so much for your work. I hope you will keep writing many more such fine tales for this site. You really have a great talent!

since it is my legal right to post a comment and not have it erased here is my thoughts this is a typical chargergirl story unfinished it seems she just can't finish a story she left "kate and conner" as well as "brett and elizabeth" unfinished it's time for her to either finish them or stop writing it isn't fair to the readers to get hooked on a story then find out it is unfinished it shows she has a total lack of respect for the readers and doesn't deserve to be allowed on this site

Yes, it may be your "legal right" to leave a comment, it's also my "legal right" to delete it. Yes, we authors can do that. But because I want everyone to see what an idiot you are, I'm going to leave it. It's also my "legal right" to end my stories as I see fit. Thanks for taking the time to make yourself look like a jackass.

Criticism should be constructive...

It needs to end here because you like so many 'authors' here dont know when enough is enough. The stories were wonderful and complete enough.<p>

They dont need to go on and have everyone having sex with everyone.<p>

Further, you obviously either only hang out with one type of person or you just dont get out much. There are many men out there who have feelings who also know when and where to express them. It requires trust, something the women I have met dont know a whole lot about.<p>

How does it feel to be lumped into a stereotype?

And found it as delightful as the first time.

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Thank you for your efforts.

Hope you have time to write more about Dave and Alicia. I would love to know what happens later on in their lives.

I've been reading stories on this site for a few years now. however, I have only yet left one comment. This yours, good work loved it all, Cheers

It made me cry and be angry at the same time. Bravo. Thanks.

i just re-read the series and still enjoy it so much :) i wish you keep writing more stories i love them they alway smake me cry ...

Chargergirl, you are VERY GOOD - VERY, VERY GOOD - I am getting on in years and I have been hardened by many hard times - a rough life - I never cry, but your stories make me tear up - so sweet, realistic and passionate! - you could make money writing - please keep contributing to this site

OUTSTANDING! I'll be looking forward to more...much more...from you. Great plot development, believable and likeable characters, and erotic sex scenes without fixating (or relying) on penis or breast size to carry the story. I get so tired of Literotica stories that think every male character must be better endowed than 99% of real-world males, and every woman has huge breasts. Have added you to favorites, you are in rarified territory there.

Good story, just the right length, and it had a decent plot. After recently reading what seemed to be 1000 pages of trash from a different author your stories were a breath of fresh air.

A friend of mine said I needed to read a story, but to keep an open mind. I seriously enjoy your stories. I do have to admit that I was put off at first about the incest part (which my friend didn't tell me about), but the characters just pull you in. I noticed that you've haven't put up any new stories, which I find to be a shame. You are a wonderful writer. I hope that you continue to write more stories.

This was undoubtedly one THE best stories here in literotica. I loved the character developement and the build up. I think you should add one final chapter About the pregnancy and how the parents accepting their children's relationship.Great story especially since i got tired of reading those stories where the brother is too well endowed and the sister has very big tits.you wrote a Masterpiece

You need to write more to this story!!!! I loved it so much!!! The story needs another chapter or two!!! PLEASE!!!! :D

Oh come on. You can't end it there. Please Please Please give us a few more chapters

You can't just leave us with a cliffhanger please give us a few more chapters because this story has the potential to be at least 6 chapters long or maybe more.

Gives us more story about them!!!! But didnt dave and alli always had protected sex????? You should make 20 more chapters about them!!!! Pleassseeeee!!!!!!

Through tears I write to you please write more of this amazing story I beg you. You have done a fantastic job and I really hope there will be more chapters to this.

A CLIFFHANGER LIKE THIS IS CRIMINAL!! PLEASE, PLEASE WRITE A FIFTH CHAPTER!!!

if you bothered to write a decent story and bothered to finish them you might get better ratings. as far as your so called right to delete comments i suggest you do two things

1) check the internet copy right law it states every thing posted is copy righted unless plagerised so deleting any comment is illegal

2) check the bottom of every page here it says " ALL CONTENTS COPYRIGHT" that alone means you can not delete or change any comments. stop being stupid and arrogant, writers like you ruin sites like this either finish your stories or stop posting. you should be banned for not finishing any of your so called stories.

all readers need to file complaints against this writer with the webmasters demanding she be banned until she finishes all current stories.

You're doing wonderfully! And as I'm sure you've noticed you are getting a lot of cliffhanger comments. It's true this is a cliffhanger but maybe if you don't mind finishing it I'm sure it would be appreciated!

But this isn't a cliffhanger ending. At the end of this chapter it says, The End. That means I ended it the way I wanted it to end. The story centered around David's struggle to accept his feelings for his sister and also around Stephanie's plan to get even with him. Those situations were resolved, thus the story has ended. Thank you all so very much for your support! ~Chargergirl xo

Chargergirl, you are a terrific writer! I haven't yet read anything of yours except the Brett and Elizabeth, and Dave and Alicia stories (though I will, of course), but these are so worthy they could easily become the basis of a novel length book. Or maybe a TV miniseries, if some network had the guts to tackle such a loaded subject. Guys aren't supposed to get teary, but I used up quite a few tissues while reading your works - I admit it. Thanks for giving us strong and sensible characters, and contrasting them with some who weren't. I hope your other stories are even half as good. Thanks again!

I thoroughly enjoyed the 2 stories. Although not needed I would enjoy an " epilogue".

Please keep writing.

Great story, but horrifically rushed ending. We go from Dave crying his eyes out in absolute despair to suddenly unknown months or years later and alli is now totally cool with having a kid and is indeed pregnant. Very jarring, but still enjoyable. To the cranky anon, while these comment sections do end up becoming boring echo chambers with zero constructive criticism, you actually do not have a legal right to post here and have it not be deleted.

If Lit gave a damn at all about commentators, they wouldn't have included a way to remove comments.

I really think you should continue the story I want to now what happens plz continue

There are a couple comments (As I have just read through all of them as of today, 04/05/2013) and a couple of them are totally off the wall, Writing is like everything else in life, it is all relative! From zero to one hundred, everything falls within that spectrum to some degree; the same with comments. In particular two of the best asshole-mouthed, pigshit sucking idiots, one from Anonymous (what else can you expect from cowards) on 07/08/09 titled "typica", and a second one by Anonymous (again, another coward) on 12/20/2011 titled "to the socalled writer"; both these turd-suckers obviously never heard the adage, "to be sure you're never thought of as an idiot, keep your mouth shut; open your mouth, speak and remove all doubt".

These two readers, and I use the term very loosely, have a hard-on that no one can compare. My comment about them is not to bring attention to their cause, but to defend the dignity and honor--AND respect-- that not only this author but also all readers on LitErotica, and elsewhere, deserve and want without the tramplingly of dirty little pea-brained imbicils trying to show the world why, in rare cases, abortion should be legal and used sparingly!!!!!

This author has not posted any stories since July 2009, although she did make a brief comment on her Biography profile in January 2012. Almost four years without any stories could mean many things. I don't make assumptions; I will say that as a recent and avid reader of incest stories on LitErotica in particular, I would be eternally grateful for future postings of beautiful story matter jostling about in her brain-matter.

So far I've read two full stories, in total both are BETTER than ninety-five percent that I have read anywhere!!! The comments by the two ANONYMOUS COWARDS I referenced above are less than five percent of all the comments; those percentage numbers are worthy of anyone withing any amount of recognitition!!

What a wonderful happy ending although I agree it was a little rushed and some kind of time stamp on the last part would have been nice also. I absolutely loved both Brett/Elizabeth and Dave/Alli please write more!

Firstly great story, and likewise to Brett and Elisabeth. I loved how both stories allowed both couples to be entwined in them. I am a huge fan of Mused and came over to your stories because of that.

More to the point for this comment. 4 years ago My wife and I lost our twin daughters to a miscarriage. Dave's reaction to the abortion was perfect. For a moment there he was I and vice versa. I don't know if you have experience, and I pray that is not the case, but I want you to know that the Father in Me that was never allowed to experience his children other than through their heart beats has been so moved and touched by this. I am not ashamed to admit I was balling through that whole segment.

I would like to know how much farther in the future the end was supposed to be, but I loved it. I loved that she thought enough of him and his lost baby to get a pair of booties for their memory specifically. I cant tell you the number of things along those lines I have bought in the last 4 years and either left out in the cemetery or tucked away in a memory chest.

I am not sure why I am writing so much but I just feel moved to do so. So anyway thanks for the great story, and for giving me a chance to comment I guess.

If I could vote, I'd give 10 stars across the board; this series, together with the preceding 'Brett & Elizabeth' series, are the perfect antidote to the often grim and dullblind reality of everyday living, thank you for making my day so much better!

I absolutely loved this story. Please keep it going. You left alot out that I would be interested in knowing. Like did they tell their parents or just let it be. I am going to read your other stories now too. If they are anything like this one they are five star quality across the board. Please please keep this one going.

The story was awesome, the timing of events was perfect! Love how the dad pulled pushy/nosey mom back from the brink of stupid so she had time to think about it and how the events reshaped or smoothed her attitude.

Gotta say I mostly didnt see the abortion coming till the Dr visit, just thought she would give up custody. I don't have kids (and dont want any) and I dont keep up with politics, religion (for the most part) and the only time I watch thr (depressing) news is when theres a hurricane in the area, so it seems kinda fucked up in a sick way that the mother can just off and kill the kid without any input from the father. Maybe Im confused but I just dont get how her 'its my body' overrules 'its my child' (too). Man, messed up.

Love the writing style. The build up. The character development. And the loving? Wow!

how alica got pregnant

My god awsome series please god please write more to it

How did Alli get pregnant they used condoms the whole time

One would hope that we don't have to explain the birds and the bees to the readership of Literotica.com.

It's a brief passage, but it's there. Dave asks Alli why she thinks she can't give him a baby. You can fill in the rest; just use your imagination, that's what stories are all about.

To everybody who thinks that the story is unfinished or rushed: rubbish! All too often we see stories that start like The Godfather 1 and 2, but they don't stop there. At least Coppola had the grace to stop after the third and unnecessary installment, but many authors here fall into the trap of pandering to those who demand more chapters, even after a story has run its natural course. Had this series continued, we'd eventually have ended up with a foursome with Brett, Elizabeth, Alicia and Daventry, and perhaps even Stephanie thrown in for good measure, or the extended Parker family. Chargergirl knows when to stop and I applaud her for it.

I'm on the fence about the Brett and Elizabeth series. Well written, but there's something that irks me. I can't put my finger on I it.

This series, however, is sublime. An awful lot of hurt, but nobody said that life is easy.

Dont some of you people know that condoms are only 90 persent affective ! They brake or split...

Good story, felt very real....

My wife and I have read all your stories at least 5 times and have never tired of them,we wish you'd write more.We are also siblings and were always inseparable.You relate the emotions very well but I wish our parents had been as understanding.Mom evidently knew as Sue told her when she was 16 and mom had talked to her then.I never knew but when I found out I was 18 and she 19.We told them before we had sex but it made no difference Dad did not deal with it well at all,to say the least.Mom stopped him from acting on his threats but both were very disappointed in us.It only made us stronger.Nothing was more natural to us it seemed like it was always going to happen when we look back.It seemed a natural progression we never did have eyes for anyone else.Even at 5 years old we were tight and slept together.When we got older our patents told us it was inappropriate but it never stopped as she would come to my room after they went to bed.They always caught us the next day but knew it was not sexual so let it be.I never touched her sexually ever we were just inseparable.When she had appendix operation I refused to leave her side and slept on a chair for a week and mom had to bring food and clothes as I would not leave her.35 years later we are still as tight,rarely ever argue and do everything together.Please write more.

Since you have posted anything on Lit. That's really too bad, as good writers don't grace these pages real often. And great writers even less so. There is about 35,000 incest stories on this site and I would venture to say your stories are of higher quality than 99% of them. I've not read many I enjoyed more than your's, but I think there has been a few. Beachbum1958 writes a very good story as well. That is, in my book anyway, some very high praise he lays on you above. I'm only allowing for the 1% because no ones perfect. But I Really don't believe that there are 350 stories from all the categories on here that are better than yours. it's all subjective at this level anyway. It's obvious from reading the comments from the readers that you inspire many folks in different and profound ways. You create beauty where it isn't always easy to find otherwise. I hope you are writing and posting somewhere, and I hope the readers appreciate it as much and enjoy it as much as I think we do.

I just want to say something to those that would say this story (or others of your's) is unfinished. You know there is no requirement that every detail be nailed down, everything placed in it's pretty box and stored away in it's place for a story to be allowed to end. An author chooses how to end their story. We don't have to like it, but maybe we ought to have an open mind about it and try to see why it was done. In this story Blaire was incredulous about her husbands unwillingness to confront the siblings with their new found information. She wanted to know everything, when, what, and how. Her husbands point being do these things really matter. Will they change the way you feel about the kids or this story? Not knowing some things gives you opportunity to give these characters continued life. Thinking of the various ways things might have gone or turned out. Someone said it would really be nice to know how long it had been between Dave's horrific experience and Allicia's birthday present to him. Did they stop using birth control on purpose? The joy of not knowing is the opportunity to write that ending in your own head.

read both stories about Brett / Elizabeth and Dave / Alicia have to say enjoyed both and felt were well written and showed the tender side of love between two people. Thank you and hope to read more of your stories. again well done

5 stars but the site won't let me selects stars. Does anyone know if the writer is still with us? I ask because it's been years since the writer posted a story. Her stories are the best of the best. Her love stories could be mainstream were it not for the obvious taboo. They'll adapt tv movies with siblings killing one another but not falling in love unless they can also show them to be unsavory people.

Thanks to everyone still reading, I appreciate it more than you know! I'm working on another story; same genre, same theme. Hope I can finish in maybe a month or so, not sure yet, but at least I'm writing again and have rediscovered the joy!

Please, make your return as soon as possible, you've been sorely missed! Here's hoping,

Will

Please continue i love your stories

I just finished reading this story for the second time. I had forgotten how beautiful it is. Thank you for sharing it with us and for your other stories as well. I'm very much looking forward to Northern Lights. Congratulations on finding your muse once again. Let's see what the two of you have conjured up!

What a beautiful tale of love, emotions anguish and hot sexy stuff.

I wish that voting were an option. This deserves a 5.

Thanks for sharing your talents.

You’re easily my favorite author. I loved Brett & Elizabeth’s tale, but felt Dave’s and Alicia’s was better because of the raw emotion you captured. Please write more!

This is the 2nd story of your's I've read. I can only say that you are, by far, THE BEST WRITER I've found on literotica.com! Another great story very well written. Please keep it up! And please keep up the "no anal"! Love is wonderful, anal doesn't belong there!

i enjoyed it. would give it 5 stars - but no rating allowed. too bad. what makes this such a nice tale is its more a story about a brother and sister - and although the sex is great - its secondary to the characters and story itself. and great character development. thanks for a great read.

I love your writing!! You touched my emotions in many ways. Thank you.

Amazing story. I loved it. You really should continue this. Even just one or two more chapters. 😁

I would have loved to read the story about the sex they had that caused her to get pregnant. The love and passion your characters display would have been a joy to read. Other than that, a beautiful story!

Thank you for this absolute true love story. I am humbled by the warmth.

Just an excellent story.

Scott

Way to make a grown man cry 😭 , great story

I never thought I would enjoy such a good love story. Loved it.

"Dave And Alicia Ch. 04:" It is with a deep hurt and broken heart that I say this, but as of today, January 29, 2021, it has been eleven and half (11.5)--almost to the day--since 'chargergirl' has posted any entry on her profile. I'm not being critical of her time, nor that she should dedicate her time to we Literotica readers, by pleasing our fantasies, but am just making a point that our hopes of her writing more might have diminished. This is the second time I've read the complete seven (7) chapter series of "Brett And Elizabeth" (three chapters) and "Dave and Alicia" (four chapters). Needless to say each and every word of the series--both stories--is phenomenal to the nth degree. The possibility that we may never have any future writings from 'chargergirl' is like the end of time has finally arrived. Woe Is Us! In a few words I must say, so far, I've enjoyed the lives and trials of "Brett And Elizabeth" and "Dave And Alicia" more than any human could ever know. Other than the two (2) previously mentioned stories I've read, I still have the remaining stories of this writer to enjoy and emotionally revel>

Absolutely freaking awesome. You took me totally by surprise with Stephanie having the abortion. I can easily emphasize with Dave. I was careful enough that all 4 of my children were never accidental pregnancies. To the best of my knowledge, I have only impregnated the two women who bore my children. And finally, none of the pregnancies occurred outside of wedlock. I'm very proud that I was responsible and thoughtful. But if an accident had happened, an my lover didn't want the baby, you can believe that I would have been adamantly opposed to the abortion option. You don't want our baby? Fine. Sign over the rights to me and I'll raise it. I believe that abortion should have stricter limits. It should probably be available only in the case of rape or in some cases incest. I'm not in favor of outlawing abortion entirely, but I am against abortion on demand and late term abortion.

Brilliant one of the best stories over here . purely love not lust. So much details. great really . brilliant work . I loved it n I will read Brett n Elizabeth also great one .😊

I just read through this one from beginning to end for the second time. Reading my own comments below, I realized that in my worked up passionate moment that I had left out one other thing about abortion that is imperative. I also favor a woman's right to preserve her own life. In this day and age with the advanced medical knowledge and technology that we have, it would be excessively rare for a pregnancy to be a threat to the life of the mother. However, I believe that if continuing the pregnancy to full term is legitimately proven to be a dire threat to the mother and her life is legitimately in jeopardy, then she should have the option to end the pregnancy in order to save her own life if that is her choice.

That being said, I'm EXTREMELY disappointed with the laws of all 50 states and the federal government that FAILS to recognize that the father has a vested interest in the matter as well. At the drop of a hat any woman can give birth to her child and name which ever man she desires as the father of her baby making him a target for child support enforcement. It then falls upon the father to demand DNA testing to prove otherwise. He is not assumed to be innocent of the charges leveled by the woman unless they are obviously unconnected in some fashion. He's pretty much convicted prejudicially and forced to prove his innocence, which is unconstitutional, but not protected by that document according to our judiciary.

Why are men singled out for double jeopardy and punishment without any rights regarding their children? Just as depicted in this story, there are lots of GOOD men out there who would gladly raise their own children and let the woman walk away from all responsibilities, especially financial, if the abortion option was removed from the equation. David is a fictional character, and yet if I had ever been put in his shoes I would have had the same reaction. From the very first day that I learned about human reproduction, probably age 10 or 11, I have always been pro-life. I would never have wanted any girl that I got pregnant to ever kill our baby. People say having children changes your life. That never applied to me. Having my 4 children completed my life and filled in what I was living for to begin with. Men need more protection and rights regarding their children if the law is going to penalize them for having a penis. It takes two people to create a baby. BOTH should have an equal voice in the entire event and life of the child. Stop making everything about the male being solely responsible for a pregnancy that a female didn't want. Stop with the injustice.

Great story from start to the absolutely loveable ending. Thanks for bring tears to an old man's eyes.

I've read all of your stories now, and I've gotta say - you are a fucking amazing author. The way you're able to portray the emotions of romance through your. writing, like heartbreak and love for example, is astounding. You know the story you're reading is well-written when you really feel the emotions that the fictional characters are experiencing. I know it's been more than 10 years since you last uploaded anything on this site so it's highly unlikely, but god I hope you come back one day.

Awesome start to finish. Dayum..I guess Im just an old softie ha!

I will be hanging around a few more years I guess ..just saddened I had to sell my Michigan UP cottage on the water front, all secluded, it was the perfect spot for storm brewing.

..cudabigfish

Marvellous love story..

Loved everything about this love story and how you kept Brett & Elizabeth's story alive as well.

5 +++++…!!!

very good, your stories are very and I wish you were still writing