by kmillerk1
The pace of the story was too fast. I couldn't feel any emotions from the characters so you need to improve that too. But the writing was good. You should probably add these points to the next story.
I agree that there could be a little more character development and background, to make the readers feel for the guys more and a bit more sensuality and sensitivity could add to the love you've already depicted! All in all, a beautiful story is shaping up! Looking forward to more of your work!!
A little rushed. No real emotion or feeling from the characters. Work on that more
No real emotion, names between son and father too confusing. Rushed ending. 2*