All Comments on 'Dawns Fatal Mistake'

This could be a good story and very believable. However, the grammar and spelling needs some work. I usually over look mistakes, but you have so many, it is hard to get through the good story.

I could enjoy the story a lot and it could be rated a good score.

but X,Y,Z and JOHN BOY go over the hill, TK U MLJ LV NV

Yes your right ,my sick thoughts do not translste into good writing

Your best yet. Who cares about the grammar and spelling, rather have the next chapter sooner with mistakes than have to wait. Only wish you would have made this an illustrated story! Keep up the great work.

I have 2 illustrated stories still waiting ro be approved. One was a story already publushed without pictures . So talk to lit.com about that

More knowledge and talent than the other applicants but couldn't bother to edit? I know this is just an erotica site, but I can never get over how bad the writing is sometimes. As far as the story itself, if it IS true , I'm sorry you went through that. It's terrible when people take advantage of people who are ignorant of basic common sense enough to leave a situation and risk jail time vs being sexually abused. But you've grown, I hope and will avoid situations like this in the future.