All Comments on 'Day 0001'

I have to compliment you on your first story.

Based on the story, and your profile, you have an idea that you think is good enough to write about. You made up a character. Now you pretend it's that person writing through her brother, pretending you're him, or her, maybe since they're ideas, both or neither. Maybe you're pretending to be her while she's pretending to be you pretending to be her while she's really her brother who is really you writing about your sister who may or may not be named Olive.

Mr compliment is this: if you write more, it cannot get any worse. I hope not anyway.

KGC was really supportive, huh?

While it’s not great literature yet, I think you should keep writing. Draft an outline, and make it clear where you’re going and who is speaking. I’m no expert, so check out some of the howto essays. Don’t let negative reviews stop you from sharing.