All Comments on 'Death in the Family Ch. 01'

A great start. I like the premise and the players. I like the scenes and the build up. I hope you have plans for this story to continue for more than a few chapters. 5 stars as I am interested in the story itself as well as the relationship between the characters. Thanks for your time and imagination.

so much more can happen with this story!!!!!!

We agree this is a great story. nice start, and great build we hope you keep this one going for some time. 5*

Great start - please continue. :) I echo what the previous (anonymous) comment says. :)

It would be an interesting plot point if the family became a refuge of sorts for the abused women of the law firm, especially if the women sought the comfort of the heir ... but you have your own ideas. :)

You were doing great with the background story and character development until you jumped to incest sex with the mom and sis within a page and 1/2. Slow the progress down somewhat and let it happen more naturally. Just my suggestion - it's your story. Great start, 5 stars

The premise of the story and characters are good. I think the chafacters need to be fleshed out more and give better descriptions. Don't tell us, show us.

this has the makings for a great story

Good start ..

Great start if not a little weird but so much potential.

I do hope you intend to continue the story because there are so many unanswered questions like "What is on Dad's computer?"

"What (if anything) happens between the secretary and the son, or the others too?"

"Why did the grandfather want to see the mother?" and

"Will the deceased dad's family try to cause the surviving trio any trouble?"

Boss where is the part 2

please give us more of this story

Wonderful story. So many interesting and sexy storylines to delve into. More hot sex between son, daughter and mom. What about the rest of mom’s family? Hot possibility for lots of sex with extended family. What’s on the dad’s computer? What’s the evil grandfather going to try? And so much more hot family sex. Yummy

Hope you continue.

Can’t wait for the next chapter

Ich hoffe, wir können noch mehr von der Familie lesen.

Next chapter?

Come on tell me there's more?!!!!!!...

Part 2, 3 and 4 or do I have to imagine.