All Comments on 'Debra Ch. 01'

Ten pages is way too long to read for most people, it should have been broken up into three parts,or most of the filler cut out.

Rubbish. Making it even worse was the grammar & punctuation. Get a friend to proofread your crap for crying out loud.

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The first paragraph stated the mother died when she was 32 and Debra was 18. She gave birth to Debra when she was 14!?

A number of grammatical, spelling, continuity and chronological errors, have made reading this work a chore.

Awesome story! Looking forward to the next chapter soon...

Just discovered this story. Very hot! Please continue.