by Ernest Hemingsex
i enjoyed it. dialogue was a little simplistic - and a little too course! but a short sexy read.
And I did like it, brought a smile to my face. This author knows words, lots of words, and uses them correctly. A+ for.vocabulary.
But some of the wording was a hair over the top. For instance:
"hedonic rippling of Natalie's vibrating cuntal walls"
Are we sure that she's a human, not a sex android?
"The spermslinger watched her bodacious, mouthwatering tits swirl frantically"
- The SPERMSLINGER? Really. OK OK, yes, I admit to admiring that word. But wow. Just an eensy Bittsey into purple prose.
"After a while he had to bring to an end the suckling due to pain at his cervical region"
OK the author taught me something here. I immediately thought 'cervical' meant a woman's cervix alone, nothing else, but it also refers to the neck, or parts thereof. So I learned something new.
But why not just say something like "His neck started aching from bending down to reach her magnificent breasts/tits/boobs/ta-tas/ etc etc.
So all in all a great read, brought a smile and a chuckle to me. My wife asked what I was reading so I lied. (It's a Sunday afternoon and I had spent the morning shoveling snow off driveway and sidewalks. - at zero degrees (F) for the third time in two weeks with more coming tonight and later in the week.So I was relaxing with some wine since I couldn't recline in privacy with some tissues or an old sock nearby.
This snow is after a warm and rainy December, it's like mama nature is getting back at me for complaining about the up-to-then warm winter. This is like December used to be when I was a teenager learning to drive in the shit. At least the road maintenance is a lot better now than in those days.
five star story. There's a reason I'm following this author.
You left a profile on mom, also her son, dad was cheat and an air force major. Give us some help......fast read thanks
I have loved your stories, very erotic. But. Agree with Anonymous, that the vocabulary was over the top in this one.