All Comments on 'Depraved Desires'

Another newbe who thinks extremely long boring stories is the way to go. Not only is the content unrealistic the storyline is as old as Moses. Boring and banal.

What the hell is this drivel? You know nothing about the military, clearly never talked to a woman other than cam girls, have you even had sex?

Not all canons are dicks. The previous one however most certainly is. I however am capable of controlling myself and wanting a real story that just happens to have sex in it, as many others do. There was a absolutley nothing wrong with your story. I quite liked it, and hope you continue with him bringing his sister and other family back into the fold. It is hardly hour fault that some lime the first poster only require a couple paragraphs and a few 'fucks', 'pussys', and 'cums', before they have to grab a tissue. Please continue.

Dewey Cheatham

Wow, name calling and general mistreatment of his daughter and her friend. Not worth the time to read this drivel.

Excellent read. Please continue!

I’m not new to this site and I will say I liked the story, and for those saying it’s unrealistic, I would like to remind them we read to get away from reality. Keep doing you and I can’t wait to see what you come up with next.

It's a difficult read in the way it's written. Bit of confusion as to which branch of the military he is serving in. Is it army or navy ? All around ... a bit over the top.

The basis of a good story line is there but it needs a re-work. Too much happening all at once. Maybe break it out into a series of stories with a slow burn ?

Consider the source though. I have no writing ability at all. I'm hardly one to offer constructive criticism.

Wow. I thoroughly enjoyed the slow build up. A really good story.

Sure sign of a fledgling author's mistake... turning a hot I/T premise into a vehicle for a harem-mode bore-fest.