All Comments on 'Destruction and Rebirth'

All that build up for the bitch just to have her run out was fairly anticlimactic.

Where is the next part/s?

I keep rereading this story, I find it good. I can picture Catalina and Alondra because in my apartment building there is a cute petite Latina with an equally cute petite little girl. Makes me wish I was thirty years younger.

Parts of the story were great. Hi ex wife was a certifiable nutcase. Why that all just exoded after 17 years is befuddling. But abandoning his kids so completely and summarily with speed a decisiveness, just means he was a sh$tty father and grade-A asshole. Wow.

Fantastic piece of story telling !

Very nice story. I think if I were Hal, the next time I came back to town, I’d get a restraining order for the bitch. And call the cops every time I saw her within a hundred yards of me. Maybe after the third or fourth time they would just keep the bitch in jail. Or in a mental hospital. Thanks, soul71, for a great story about Loving Wives. One a definite keeper and the other not worth killing. Even though it might be really tempting. 😇. 5🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟

Outstanding

Check marks virtually every human emotion.

Well-done!!!!

Wonderful Story. Please write more LW and Romance stories

Second read thru and still a great read⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

It's strange, but my experience with the whole Latinx thing is vastly different. Maybe its because im not American, and not living in America, but my friends who consider themselves part of that culture dont take offence to it, the accept it as totally logical gender neutral term to describe the Latin American expat (and those descended from them) community in our country.

Either way, a truly excellently written story. You really should write more LW stories, because when you do you knock them out of the park. 5 stars

You don't write many LW stories. When you do they're great. Thanks for sharing.

A great story, many thanks to the author for sharing it with us readers. About the “Latinx” thing, I don’t know who coined that word, or even why they did. Seems like in the last twenty five years or so a lot of words have been coined by who-knows, just to label people and categorize them into neat little slots. And in the process of that, it just further separates and alienates people even more

Sorry, off my soapbox. Again, thanks, soul71, for a great story. *****Five stars 🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟

I found it a tad slow to start and could not walk away later. Has to be one of my most read. Now in my Favorites and will be read again soon. I absolutely love it.

Great story, though long.

I loved it!

Good story... But a Volvo? Can you say Fugly;)

Very well written story. I'm a military and details oriented person and also from NC. When i remarried, my kids disowned me. I gave my oldest away at her wedding and mchild and grandchild are the same age. I never even knew about my youngest kids wedding. They DXed me in military jargon. NC State is an Engineering school while Duke is primarily a medical and classical liberal arts school. Again, well done. 5 stars.

Well a good rounded story, full of details full of characters that are very real,

I agree wholeheartedly with the commenter from 9 months ago with the post starting with "I get that the Bitch was a delusional, psycho, narcissistic slut with severe mental issues..." What he did to the kids was execrable. I get rhat delusional wife put them in the middle, but they are kids and he turned on them and ghosted them very quickly. He was an asshole of a father. Yes bad things happen to parent-child relationships in a bitter divorce, made worse because the ex-wife is a certifiable psycho. But the kids were teenagers. They will grow up. Abandoning them for 7 years is a jackass move.

One of my very favourite stories on this site. MC is initally flawed in the way he deals with his kids but then 7 years later, the way he reconnects is spot on. The little detail of him learning Spanish really got to me personally as that is as true a romantic gesture as someone can make for someone they love. The icing on the cake was how he dealt with the ex the whole way through, dropped her like a sack of fermeting shit and then stood his ground once she came back into the picture. The cherry on top would have been her being carted out of the wedding reception in a Straitjacket but that's just me being a dick ;)

Should have had Amber and David move to Charlotte instead of being around the bitch

NOW THIS IS HOW A REAL MAN SHOULD ACT ON HIS CHEATING SKANK WIFE AND UNGRATEFUL CHILDREN!!

One of your best stories 5*.

Why did you give the lunatic ex-wife bitch so much prominence at the end!!!

That was a great story...

Far too much of David. Otherwise liked the story, as I do most of yours. Thanks

Great story of "death and rebirth." He rose from the ashes, like a Phoenix. Yes, he was saved by the love of a wonderful woman AND her family. My only complaint is that you rushed the ending.

Desertman, I can see that happening. My issue isn't that it happened but that he gave them no real chances. One and done. He turned his back on them and wouldn't listen while he was walking away.... Literally. Then refuse to talk to them while they begged his parents. As an adult it's you that has to understand kids make silly choices and especially in a divorce can be easily manipulated. In other cases the kids never come around... That's a different circumstance.

Very good story line. That ex-wife needed to be put in the crazy house. She has a whole colony of squirrels living in her pea brain. I did note that some of the wording seemed awkward in spots, but this is a solid story. 5 stars from me and a big thank you for sharing such an entertaining story.

Well-written...

...not the first story on LW with a Father leaving his family due to a cheating wife, losing his children in the process, finding a new love to help him rebuild his self-confidence, and then regaining contact with his children, but certainly an enjoyable one !

The few spelling errors will enrage some of the anonymous posters to whom a happy ending is against their religion, but they are minor, almost irrelevant, and really don't detract from this happy-endng story.

I gave it 5 stars for the overall skill of the author who developed the story and an engaging cast of characters.

To those who take exception to the mc's treatment of his children let me say this:

After my wife and I separated (her choice) and I started seeing my children aged 10, 10 (twins) and 7, they refused to see me. It turns out that she got so distressed whenever I was due to see them, it upset them so much, they didn't want to

see me. So I hardly ever saw them until they were adults. Even now, 50 years later I am estranged from 2 of them and my relationship with the 3rd is difficult.

So, yes these things do happen.

Regarding the story, it needs better editing. It could be shorter and tighter, with grammar, missing words and spelling errors cleaned up.

I liked the loving relationship between the mc and his new wife and her family, as well as the reconciliation with his children.

The ex was portrayed as bat shit crazy, but in the real world she would probably be diagnosed as bi-polar (manic depressive, as was).

I have to say that this is one of the best stories I have read on literotica and I have read thousands of stories on here⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Great story, once again well written 5*

One small gripe. Latino Woman is just WRONG. Latino is the masculine, Latina is the Feminine. Or just "a Latin Woman" not Latino. Please?

Overly long but enjoyable nevertheless. I think his children accepted him back a little too easily. The Bitch was certifiable and true to her nickname to the end.

honestly i think the story was good but would have been so much better if you just kept the ex wife out of the story all together after he divorced her. The whole story line with her wanting him back and being delusional just seemed contrived and pointless IMO

Really good story except he didn't really burn the bitch as she is still scheming and vile right till the very end!!

The 2 ungrateful kids had to learn the hard way for siding with their skank mother....at that age they know about sex and making babies so they weren't wholly innocent

Who cares about the story of David? He seems to be the key to everything

I get that the Bitch was a delusional, psycho, narcissistic slut with severe mental issues, but why in the heck in the world would the MC abandon his two kids for seven years? I see commenters below cheering that defiant act by the MC as he not only ripped into his 14 and 16 yr old kids, but abandoned them, and ghosted them. Wtf? Are any of those same commenters, parents with children? For sure the ex-wife was repugnant. And I get that she was manipulating the kids, but they are children for pity's sake. How the heck does he almost instantly put them on the side of the "enemy". The rest of it was interesting and his relationship with Catalina is great. So much description of the extended family meeting and forming bonds. So many details. And then the confrontation with the ex at the end who ends up in a psych ward. But really total abandonment? Fine move out of state when they hit 18. Stick it out in town and be a man for 3-4 years. But then to sever all ties, reinforcing that with the grandparents, and then the kids finding that thr grandparents refuse to tell them anything about their dad, so he doesn't also cut his own parents out of his life? Wtf? She may be thr Bitch but as a father he is a grade-A asshole!!!

god finally, many of this type of story usually have wimpy and weak main protagonist

reading the first page of this already feels satisfying

Sweet romance story…LW part was incidental …wish there was suspense or tension in the story line

Delightful! There are so many things right with this story!

Great story!! This MC had balls to burn the bitch and the ungrateful children BUT the end was a total disappointment with the drunken skank ex wife still showing up!! Guess she wasn't burned enough!!

A pretty good story, a well written too. I personally thought it was a bit too long, that the day-to-day minutiae slowed down moving the story forward. As I said, just my personal opinion. But thanks for sharing it.

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Anudder cracker jack story!

11/10!!!!!

Hey Anon from August 9th - 'Latinx' is a term not embraced by a majority of Latinas/Latinos, my deceased wife who was of Mexican descent did not like it.

I thoroughly enjoyed this story.

Thank you for sharing,

I really enjoyed it, and thought it was a well written story. Thanks for sharing it with us.

I didn't know that Latinx (damn that MSM) was a derogatory term for Latino's and Latina's. Thanks for the information.

fun story .

thank you

What a great story, especially with Nat and Catalina and family all getting their happily ever after. Well, the delusional Bitch got exactly what she deserved, nothing and ended up in a psych ward right where she belonged. Well done 5/5

2nd read and it was great both times I read it. You are my favorite author on this website. I love all your work

One of your best, loved the romance. I did not know you had it in you.

But there you go.

Scored 5/5

Not a bad story but about 6 pages to long and all the new family stuff was sickly sweet.

Very nice tale, especially the last few chapters.

Loved it,

Nice story but way to long with minutiae.

Great story but the continued interference by the bitch and her emotional abuse of her kids was fucking annoying!

Still a great story, the 2nd time I read it! DerMtMan

good, interesting but way too long

It’s a nice story. Hated the bitch but loved the new extended family. You obviously put in a lot of time writing your story.

A long light weight story.

A truly great story.

Wow, this is one angry author.

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The heat in chilli peppers is contained mostly in the flesh and is most concentrated on the pithy, white connective tissue.

Just saying'

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PS have the story five stars - loved it.

Great story. love it. AAAAAA++++++

Enjoyed the story, took about 1/4 way in to really get into it. In a few places I thought I was reading the "Marlboro Man", no offense. As it got to the end, I thought it dropped rather quickly and a few more paragraphs would have been good. Gave it 5 stars.

A great story of very believable flawed characters.

RE anon's comment how could a father leave his children.

Easily. You simply need to love them so much that when they betray you the hurt is unbearable. The more you love someone, the deeper the pain from their betrayal.

Also remember that hurt people do hurtful things.

So a switch flicks on inside him that turns his love into pain, so he can easily leave them.

Then over time, his resultant behaviour becomes a habit. So his first reaction when he thinks of his kids is to continue protecting himself by rejecting any thought at all about them. After all, in his mind, they are still a part of Team Bitch.

Love and hate are both merely different expressions of deep emotional feelings. They are not opposites.

Indifference is the opposite of love.

Apathy is the nemesis of love.

Just not caring about your loved one will kill a marriage as surely as adultery will.

Started out as crap but got quite a bit better.

soul71

It's almost like they started it, didn't enjoy it, and thought you would like to know why. Crazy.

3 pages in, I have some thoughts. Let's say these are my options and you, the Author, are very much welcome to disagree.

I was actually intrigued when MC's daughter treated her mom's infidelity like it was nothing. It's just sex, according to the siblings. Up until now we've seen everything that happened through MC's POV. That's the first time we get another character's view. Even if that character is a teenager. And that little conversation tells us that while MC did love his children, he never really had an active role in their upbringing. Because that would have instilled a moral code in the children that reflects their father's value. Then we see MC leaving his offspring, without second glance. This can be interpreted as his outrage or lack of care. But we know it's outrage. We also learn how he was always present in their lives, going to school functions and whatnot. This makes things more interesting as this means MC thinks he was a good parent, but he clearly isn't. He didn't work on his parenting. Maybe he also wasn't that much of husband? But we see MC leaving everything behind and starting a new life, went on to have no contact with his children for 7 years. All those potential I was talking about? Thrown out of the window. This character is so hurt that he couldn't talk to his children, but can supposedly marry AND ANOTHER child? And 7 years later when he talks to his children, they literally grovel for HIS apology? 7 years, no adults, let alone a father, would hold something a teenager said in a difficult life situation over their heads.

Skimmed through the rest of the story, all these problems MC has never gets resolved. And I'm not even talking about the felony he committed by that fund transferring. That's a legit criminal offence and any lawyer worth his salt would have figured that shit out. As I said before, this was my take on the MC. Either all of these were intentional on the author's part, which I sincerely doubt, or this story needed some serious editing, which it never got.

And yet you clearly had time to comment on something you didn't even finish, weird.

I tried reading this, but couldn't get past page one. What kind of father would treat his kids that way? Clearly, the daughter reaching out is the only adult present.

Good story. But the guy is a prick. I'm surprised anyone would marry him and want to have kids with him. Your teenage kids said something stupid and hurt you? Uh, that's what every teenager does. Catalina should have had a conversation with him before marrying him about if he'd treat their kids the same way. I'm sure there are people like him out there but it's still sad that he missed out on 7 years of his kids because he took to heart what a teenager said.

It’s like a hallmark story, but for guys 😬 5⭐️

Decent story.

One of the best stories on this page. Excellent dialogue and fantastic humor written into the plot. 5* +

Just a quick note to let you know I really enjoy your writing.

Also Ithank you for mentioning El Yucateco Black Label Reserve Chili Habanero Hot Sauce. I liked it so much I bought a case.

Thanks!

jesus another martian slut ray wife, another husband who finds a perfect woman afterwards.

A dime a dozen story.

This needed an editor to clean out all the filler and keep it on track.

enjoyed this story but there again i enjoy stories that are a little longer than 1 or 2 pages well written 5+ stars for me

Wow. I hope the whiney commenters know this is fiction. Some of their reviews read like they are talking about a real MC. This was a good first story with a strong MC instead of a MC that just forgives everything and reads like a wimp. (Really not trying to insult you.) Unfortunately, there was quite a bit of filler in this story. Although the MC locked out his kids for 7 yrs, he did let them back into his life. Please write another story with a strong MC. Maybe with revenge to the characters that mainly deserves it.

P.S.: Please finish the story about The Silver Wind. That's my favorite story of your writing. Thank you for your time on it.

great story soul really enjoyed it

I cannot understand the limp dicks who score it so low.

This was a very long story, I’m sure you could have done it with 6 pages. 7 years to see the light and not give his child a chance to explain.to stubborn for his own good. The bitch wife should have been put away after trying to get the daughter to spread her legs for her boy toys. This wife never should have been allowed to come to any wedding . That is why you do not get @5 th star.

This was a great story. I loved it and gave it 5 stars.

Honestly this story was 8 or 9 pages too long, there was simply no depth to it which negated the need for it to be as long as it was.

2 stars. Could easily been 4 or 5, if the protagonist would have been given some self worth and pride.

It was a good story at the start, but after the smoke cleared from the original drama, the last 9 pages felt like an extended epilogue. The climax to the action should be at or near the end of your story. You need to either shorten your story or inject more fireworks into, or around, the wedding. Thank you for sharing with us, I look forward to your next story.

Great story always your the goat !!!

Tell WAA01 were waiting those last two stories are great work!!!

You two are my favorite writers on this site

At least 2/3 of this story was filler.

it feels like real life, and great story.

Really enjoyed this story

Nice!

You are one of my favorite writers. Occasionally a little dark but always enjoyable.

Good story for a young man to see what kind of woman he wants and what kind he doesn’t

Wonderful story! The slut finally got her payback when Nat married his REAL wife and his older children call her MOM. She also is their mother now, and don't try to hurt them, because mama bear will kick your ass. A continuation would be fitting, to show Carson and Rosa's future and Catalina and Amber ( her daughter)s new babies. Maybe the bitch would drink herself to death or Catalina will hurt her badly for abusing her new son and daughter...

I did get Nat going off and abandoning his kids, because that’s a common LW trope. But there was way too much middle, and at times it seemed that he was using his money to try to buy his kids back.

I skimmed several pages, and was still able to keep up; that’s a sure sign that the story is just too long.

A wonderful,well-written story. Althiugh long, the story read the s w csmoothly, without padding. 5 stars.

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Some minor.editing items: it is not "the Discovery Place", but "Discovery Place". You used the word "palette " instead of the correct word "palate" when referring to food.

That was a very, very well told story that really took me away. Sensitively told with believable characters and exactly the required amount of drama that really makes this work stand out. Would have fit in romance as well. Thanks for the work and sharing! N 5 * !!!!

That was a very, very well told story that really took me away. Sensitively told with believable characters and exactly the required amount of drama that really makes this work stand out. Would have fit in romance as well. Thanks for the work and sharing! N 5 * !!!!

Great Story as always thanks

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