All Comments on 'Diamond Gals'

Lucky Bastard!!!

"Carly, Carly." I shouted as I shook her limp boy. limp boy? Body maybe?

Good story. Are any of the kids his?

duh no because he is the dad

Unless you plan on giving these characters some personality, or your purpose is a run of the mill wish fulfillment stroke story. None of these characters have a story. We don't care about any of them. The main character doesn't feel bad apparently for ruining his marriage, or how his daughter who he claims to love, might handle him banging all her friends. And we see no reason for why she's okay with it and wants to sleep with him. The writing isn't bad on its own, meaning there's few typos and grammar issues. But this story is just bad.

blah, just total freaking blah!!!!

a documentary on grass is more interesting and stimulating

Sucks cat shit. But not just any cat shit. We're talking the shit of a frog-eating cat. That's how badly this sucks. So: no me gusta, gefallt mir nicht, hung flop li.

Need to know what happens to the worksheet they grow up. Does he take them as we'll

Enjoyed it but needs to be finished

First read of this story, I like it. Needs to be finished though. AAAA+++++

Plz make a sequel where he fucks the second generation of Dimond Gals when there older

Agree with all of the other comments that want this narrative to be finished. If you do, I suggest you get yourself a proof reader or editor.