All Comments on 'Dinner for...'

wow!!! you sure do write wonderful fantasy. Cant wait to read another one ;)

i keep reading this over and over. it is my favorite by far

This story is so well written, and sexy....really hot!! Placing it into my favorites to come back to again.

Wonderful story Sir

This story got me so aroused. I want to be that girl more than anything. I love when men take control of their women. Great job.

Amazing... You have such a way with words.. I came so hard. What I would give to be that girl.

Loved this story, I got wet even before reading the whole thing, I could picture myself as the girl in this story while reading it an your way with words is amazing Sir

There's a few things that need some work here from a technical standpoint. Second person can be ideal for erotic when executed carefully, but its a tricky POV to get correct in communicating the events, feelings, and setting. The other item that would help enhance this piece is if you break up some of your text blocks. You have one particularly long one that needs to be split into 2 to 3 shorter blocks; its visually fatiguing to the reader otherwise and I personally glossed it as a result of getting lost when I scrolled.

wow... just wow Sir... i could imagine being that submissive...

the story definitely got me very moist....

i'll definitely check out Your other stories on here. much love, bekka

Outstanding Sir! I really want to be her. The way you own your girl had me wet before I even reached down. Such a tease with the second page :(

Please post the second chapter.

Perfection.

Loved it Sir. So hot and well written that I lived it. :) xx